All Comments on 'Grant & Sandy Pt. 01'

Where will this story go? For now a dangerous but lustful trick to be performed in a moving car...3*

This story can go a lot of ways. Personally I hope they get together with the other couple and get to watch each other a little more.

OK, if you insist:

Very slowly, tediously, perhaps obnoxiously, the white couple will end up swapping with the black couple; bring on the BBC and whitey's talented tongue, and/or

The white and black chick will end up fucking the college kids from work, with their husbands' approval, of course, and/or

The white and black husbands will end up fucking some other young single women, like maybe the college boys' girl friends, and then, sooner or later,

The white and black couple will come to their senses and stop slutting around, or end up having mixed race babies, or getting divorced, or a combination thereof.

I will wait to rate the whole thing depending on how well you fill in the details.

Nice scene setting and spiffy dialogue. You could use some editing help getting your clauses sorted to clairify sentence meaning and to improve flow. Plenty of

plot options for further fun, too.

5* and one of the best opening stories I've read in a LONG LONG TIME.

You write well, very descriptive, like it, going forward to Chapt 2 now.

So many possibilities. Very refreshing to read a hot story with implied trouble down the road, but not a threat if the husbands treat their wives with respect and desire now. The wives made a terrific first gesture with the road head, but they must be careful in the future. The work husbands /brothers could be both intriguing and slippery slope at the same time. What possibilities! *****

Not too much mystery to where this.is heading. I hope it doesn't, but it is what it is.