by JakesZA
author if english is not your language then you can use a volunteer editor to help you. try it. it will make a difference
I'm not english speaking and only have word to correct mistakes, so rather tell me the story is shit than criticise the spelling...lol
I thought that your story would be interesting but then I ran into all of the grammatical errors. Misspellings and usages ectera. For instance at one point you say "manager slash agent" it should be manager/agent. Some of your misspellings include rooky- should be rookie. And the word is fucking not fucken, which is as far as I know not even a word.