All Comments on 'Hand Cream'

I think it is a great story sexual and interesting it was very good read.

So he is just another wimp and next she will have some guy nailing his ass for money now that she has turned him into a prostitute get up and run while you still have a chance

there is nothing wimpy about exploring your bi side, it takes courage. i enjoyed the slippery slope that led to a cock cumming in your mouth and know from experience that you can get addicted to that. more please! go with it, get into it!

The scene was pretty hot, but it felt a little too impersonal. Where you could do better would be to actually spell out the dialog as speech, instead of narrating it. I've had several talented authors show me the difference. Example:

(Yours, narrated)

Afraid for her answer, I asked her if she wanted to do something like that again and if we had turned a corner. With a wink she said we might have to wait to find out.

(Spelled out)

Afraid for her answer, I asked, "Will you want to do something like this again? Have we turned a corner?"

She winked and replied, "We might have to wait and find out."

Actually hearing (imagined of course) the characters speak gives them some dimension, instead of feeling like cardboard cutouts.

Anyhow, thanks for sharing and good luck to you!

Many women have fantasy or desire to see her man suck cock. For most women like Riley it is a huge turn on and also improves the relationship. It takes some time and effort but many guys have given in, some enjoy it very much

Did I miss the part where Mike paid?

Great story - very erotic. Great manipulation