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by jimmycoco

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AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
get an editor

Needs to have an editor seriously. Also give it a super good proof reading before uploading. Several cases of " i " when it should have been " I " which ends desire to read any further.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
That's it?

No buildup, no character development, nothing. It could be a good story with all that added. And what's with the "asl**p"?

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