All Comments on 'Happy Holiday Memories?'

Too short. No consequences, open ended, meh.

I hope there is a part 2…

Surprise! Surprise!

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Sympathy for all the characters in the story. Awareness of real self can come in later years, but, adultry is still wrong. Gave a score of four * and would have enjoyed a longer read.

not a fan if how you put the young girls in the middle

A good opening. A great plot only not to be fully realized in this Flash story. Maybe consider a follow up

She takes them on a gameshow to show off pictures of vacations that her husband wasn't present for. Then tries to convince him he was there and just forgot. Then says she wasn't brave enough to tell him she was a lesbian.

Just a slight tweak to Hariet's dialogue would have made this story make much more sense.

4 stars for an unfinshed but good start! finishing would get more stars

Harriet is delusional to appear on national television and do this. It is totally disrespectful of her husband and children and to expect to do so without disaster is unbelievable. This hints of her lover trying to destroy Harriet’s family to guilt control her. This is not a good stopping point even if there were more parts coming.

Unfinished stories don’t get stars. I hope John crushes Amber for destroying his daughters’ young lives. He should take them on a permanent holiday and never come back. Harriett can be alone with Amber who will move on to another target with a family to break.

The premise of the story -- that wife would go on television to talk about trips with her lover -- is so asinine that everything after that fails. Also it is rather unlikely for little girls to prefer a missing dad rather than the mother that is with them all the time. So, story makes no sense.

What a great setup for a story. It was a little rushed—probably needed a page or two to prepare for the reveal, but awesome. But that is my point—it is rushed and not yet a story. This could be a lot of fun to read. You like nuance I can tell; why not follow that instinct and tell a rich, nuanced, and unfolding narrative? I would enjoy reading it!

I know that people often want longer stories, but this flash story contained all of the information that one needed. The premise was interesting, but plausible (I mean, a lot of people want to be on television, often even knowing that it will be embarrassing) the notion the the wife puts up past vacation photos without connecting that they could potentially cause a problem is plausible (albeit a bit Freudian) And the whole thing is a vignette that if you wrote another 20,000 words on it wouldn’t add much. This little episode answered everything! LOL

Fun read, I can take it from here.

Ah the innocence of young children. I guess we can work out what happens next. An explosive 5* from me.

Yeah, the worked well. 5* an amusing vignette, though one covering a sad topic.

Just a snippet with no front and back. Unless there's a sequel that make sense - 3.4*

Cement shoes to davey jones locker for these two wastes of skin

Another ENTITLED bitch burnt. Again, no responsibility or accountability placed on the bitch, yet the system and society will give the childeren to the bitch, along with at least half the income he makes to subsidize her nefarious actions. He'll loose the house, become a one weekend a month parent, and who will suffer the most, the children.

I agree Cement shoes and a one way trip to Davy Jones.

2nd chapter please

2 stories posted by this author today - both without endings, both not worth the time.

Where is the rest of the story? Why would he take the cheating bitch home?

Don't bother if you can't finish a story

What a cold fish

@ J Reader Comics

No consequences? What would you call being all over the Internet exposed as a adulterous lesbian?

You're one thick SOB.

How is this a loving wife? It should have come under another category. Will John leave the Navy now? What will happen to the girls? Amber. everyone knows about you now. Talk about cheating while the guy is in the service especially with his money; and teaching the children to lie.

Far from finished... no ody gets off that easy... I hope she at least has to walk home in a driving rainstorm

Quirky but ummm, why would Harriet out herself as a cheat in this way? I can't imagine she really didn't remember with whom she went on holiday. She wasn't brave enough to tell the truth in private but plenty brave enough to do the big reveal on national TV? That doesn't make sense to me.

A very real story but the setting is so unrealistic.

As is the norm the guy is about to get fucked again, though sadly not in the good way.

I'm more disappointed when I see you submit two partial stories on the same day.

You do have a talent for writing and ideas, but seeds are meant to be what we plant, not what we harvest.

There is potential in this story to go further.

Unfortunately, the writer ended it.

There's a germ of something here, but the TV thing was pointless unless it's fleshed out more.

Can't decide if this is the train wreck that has already occurred, and people are slowing down to look at the carnage, or if this train is still speeding into the station...with the engineer dead at the wheel. Interesting read either way.

What was there was well done, but it was short enough to be called "abrupt." Bombshells deserve a little more aftermath. Even if only in a summary paragraph.

She brought the kids into her perfidy -- not the homosexuality but the deceit -- and for that she deserves significant consequences.

No way would she submit those photos. She would lie and use a family shot of all four members.

Why would a "loving" mother continue a relationship with a person who belittles her children's father and whom they despise? I mean it's not as if she only sees the woman away from the kids. No, she's forced them to be around her. Even as she disrespects their father. She also made her children withhold the truth from him. Disgusting. Her happiness is not more important than her children's. And I'm a mother saying that.

Not sure why you posted this. There was nothing interesting about it. No plot, no story.

Agree with others good start but if this is the end it sucks

"the presenter, Collete" - Since she just gave her name, you don't need to.

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Another non-ending. So what happened next? The girls are too young to normally be allowed to choose, but I can't see her getting custody, especially if Amber is in the picture.

To all people complaining that stories are too short What do you expect? Whore and Peace?

Totally improbable. Why on Earth would they take part in a show when they didn't even spend the holidays together ? Just doesn't make sense.

The LW tendency to have an even dumber woman every day has reached a new record low. Really? This premise requires a woman so dumb she probably wouldn't be able to form a coherent sentence.

The story is a little out there in regards to the plot. However, I liked it and if you finished it I would have given more than 4 stars.

I actually liked this one. However it is too short and needed a little more filling.

Succint and complete. Five stars

She didn't suddenly get hit with the dyke ray. She's placed her children in a no win situation because of her selfishness. Not only is she a carpet muncher, she's a piece of shit liar and cheater.

Finish the Damn Story!

More like brave enough to watch the husband find someone better than her. A lot of selfish cheaters deep down never want to see their spouse love anyone else. It's sick. Even if they don't respect them and sleep with others, they can't stand the idea of setting them free to find anyone else.

Two supposed storied today, this and The Other Betrayed Spouse, where you only posted part of the story. Yes, sometimes it's good to leave the story a little open ended. Neither of these qualify. If you wanted them to be flash stories, label them as flash stories.

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For example, why was she so stupid as to include pictures of vacations when he wasn't there, and then be surprised that about this. There's a big disconnect. It's apparent this isn't how she was planning to tell him she's gay.

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Easy rating of 1.

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BTW, too many people seem to think 5 is the default rating, when is should be reserved for only great stories, not just because the story exists.

Look's like John will remain with the RN after all. 5 stars

Needs a part 2

What's the point in writing a tale without a beginning and even more, an ending ? No good at all.

What a waste of a readers time.

There is potential for a story, but you didn't quite make it.

Keep writing and thank you.

Sigh. I don't know why I even bother with this section any more.

The overwhelming majority of the writers don't seem to have any concept of what a story a story is and instead just post blurbs.

Dalton, is this story your attempt at 'February Sucks'? This one is way to short leaving it hang right on the edge of an abyss?

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2.5** hooyah - subject is interesting but your style sucks

I can imagine this story resulting from the author trying to come up with a more unique way of a husband finding out his wife is cheating. For me, the vehicle of discovery being some tv program based on families showing vacation photos is really a stretch. This programming concept would seem to something suited for TikToc or other social media.

Maybe a better reveal situation may be a family get-together where vacation photos come out and then all the questions begin as to when did these trips take place, where was the father/husband, who took the photos, etc. The wife forced to reveal that she is a lesbian with a woman lover really was too much to pack into this short story.

I give 3 stars for concept but lack of execution.

FTDS....*1*

Again writers No Dam Ending to the story Why ? It seems you guys can start a story well then you dump it without a ends and that sucks big time!

Children save the day. Thanks for your writing.

1 about a 10th of a story

Someone (a none-mouse) complained of no ending. No resolution is what I think was meant. Sounds like life to me!

how does it end?

Needs more to it. Thanks.

As it stands, the story is pointless

WTF? A statement? Why not a story.

Another load of fucking rubbish from this talentless writer, I don't know why he bothered.

Not really a story more of an outline.

Pitiful!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

WTF - That was not even a story

Nobody (Harriet) would have such a conversation with her husband on a televised program. Wait! Perhaps it might happen on the Jerry Springer show. Three stars ⭐️ for this one.

Where's the end??? FTDS

I learned the first time check the comments first.

Since FTDS is gone there is little hope for story closure.

Well, I guess if your going to nuke your life. Might as well do it from orbit.

Wow, nothing like a global admission or will be once it hits the internet. Still, how stupid could the wife be with showing photos from three holidays that would not have shown her husband in any of them, and no-one, not even the producers detected the anomaly.