by LustfulWishes
Liked it, a little short but liked it. Hopefully there will more to the story. I want to see how things progress. Good job
This should have been at the end of the first chapter - a closing teaser, not a chapter by itself.
Standing alone, it's just a crappy teaser that doesn't make me look forward to the next chapter - as though you are getting worse, not better.
I'm liking the story so far and I look forward to the next chapter
ok you got a great concept and I am loving the story the siblings have a good base that makes you root for them and invest into the sister and brother now just need to work on spacing each page for this sites stories is about 7-10 word document pages long keep that in mind when setting it you could combine these two chapters into one and still be on one page of the site