by LustfulWishes
ok you got a great concept and I am loving the story the siblings have a good base that makes you root for them and invest into the sister and brother now just need to work on spacing each page for this sites stories is about 7-10 word document pages long keep that in mind when setting it you could combine these two chapters into one and still be on one page of the site
I'm liking the story so far and I look forward to the next chapter
This should have been at the end of the first chapter - a closing teaser, not a chapter by itself.
Standing alone, it's just a crappy teaser that doesn't make me look forward to the next chapter - as though you are getting worse, not better.
Liked it, a little short but liked it. Hopefully there will more to the story. I want to see how things progress. Good job