All Comments on 'He Came, He Saw Ch. 01'

by cumallday

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mrbluejeans98mrbluejeans98almost 14 years ago
Incredible story!

Wow. This was amazing. Youhave a really good writing style, give plenty of back story, and have just the right amount of detail. I love this story!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 17 years ago
very very good

It is rare to read a story here with as much attention to character and narrative. An excellent start to what I hope will be many more excellent chapters.

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
EXCELLENT FOUNDATIONS!

This is a great 'foundation' story for your series. There's a LOT of possibilities. AND the Handjob scene was one of the best I've read. Congratulations!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 18 years ago
Yes, please!

I was very impressed with how you kept things on a relatively low level for starters, even going to the point of giving us background on how loverboy and miss moretti slowly found their way to where they were now.

Please keep writing.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 18 years ago
MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOORRRRRRRRE

i fucking love how it started give me more

AnonymousAnonymousabout 18 years ago
good start

It has a good start hope you post second part soon and equally good

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