All Comments on 'He Said, She Said Pt. 01'

You need to remember if you're referring to someone in the first or third person. It gets confusing if I'm feeling my cock harden in his pants. Know what I mean?

POV changes every 5 sentences or so? Just learn to write in third person. Especially for barely a one-page story. Just a hot, confused mess.

You do understand that that little bitch owns his ass now and forever.

Dammit. Everything out of your mind is magic. mijo.