by Justanotherdirtyoldman
Really nice premise.
Nice buildup.
There needs to be much more in the way of details, though. When she plays with his cock, or sucks it, there needed to be conversation. After a detailed description of what she's doing: Do you like it? Should I do more? Some instructions from him as to how to do it better would help. Slower, I don't want to cum too soon, it feels so good. Hold it/suck it tighter. Looser. Play with/lick my balls. Use your tongue underneth, just below the head. Like this?
Had real potential.
Three stars.