All Comments on 'Hell's Household Ch. 01'

Some parts, like the conversation at the end with Mitzi and the Dean could use a little more rationalization. Also, separate the text more. I had a bit of a hard time getting through the huge clumps of words on page 4. Other than that, very immersing story.

Add me to the list of people waiting for the next part.

Awesome! Found the first story enticing and now a continuation!

Great story, looking forward to part 2!

When is the next story? Can't wait!

Xxxecil, you rock! Looking forward to the next installment. Maybe its time for her to get bred/ transform into a full succubus in the next installment?

really looking forward to more writing on this line. Talented and skilled.

Loved the original story, and this one looks to be off to a great start. Sinister enough to keep the reader on edge, but also a genuine pleasure, erotic and otherwise, to read. Keep it coming! :)

I like the way the various threads are being woven together.

Heather needs to talk to her mom in the police station or in the ambulance about these desires and urges, and then her mom ought to take her "under her wings" to train her to control these outbursts.