All Comments on 'Her Fate, His Love'

Loved it it's really interesting can't wait 4 d next one

Good story I'm looking forward to the next one, please don't you (the author) or anyone else take this badly; for I do not mean it so. When the characters are speaking use "speech marks" it will help other readers and will help with the flow with the story

'Were on our want you home'

WTF is that meant to say?

Please, please don't post more unless you have an editor, it was horribly written, no punctuation and grammar was shocking.

First off, do not let the rude comment below get to you. This is your first submission and I will be willing to bet not only were you very excited but you also are checking your submission often for votes or comments. After reading your story, I encourage you to continue. It seems to me you know exactly where you want your story to go and are rushing to get there. You have the main points thought out now you just need to go back an take your time.. Add detail and description fillers... Once you think you have it ready to post, forget about it for about 3 or 4 days then go back and read over it. Mistakes are easier to catch with fresh eyes and a clear mind. I look forward to seeing how your writing evolves as your story continues!

I agree with ArcaneDesires tips. Besides every author has haters don't let them bother you.

Just read and enjoyed the story.

Good start. If you have someone you trust to read over what you have written before submitting would be good. Sometimes new eyes can catch errors.

Good luck with the next chapter.

I like what I have seen so far but this feels more like a outline to a larger story.

Was a good story. I can see this is going to be a big one. Can't wait to read more. May I suggest you use quotations when they talk and italics when they communicate telepathically. Hope to see more where its not each point of view. Give it a 5 for great reading

this looks like the lead in to a much bigger and longer story, i do hope so

I can't wait to read more. Great job. I am loving it so far. Thanks for your hard work!

Hey everyone I have the second chapter done and the third is mostly there I just need to get the second chapter edited and I will post it ASAP.