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Click here'I guess my anger at the Moirai is a lot like that,' I sighed, and suddenly my rage was gone. I felt empty. I went back to the window and looked for Tara and Cindy. They were there still playing and laughing. The feelings that came the last time were still there, but they were greatly muted.
'If I go downstairs now, it will be like I'm accepting what the Fates have planned for me. I'll never get back to my own life,' I thought. I couldn't do it. I loved my parents, Cindy and possibly even Tara, but I'd taken all I could. I needed some time away to think.
I don't remember starting, but in no time at all I had the duffle bag that typically collected dust on the bottom of my closest filled with clothes. I took a moment to write a note to my parents. It probably wouldn't help them accept what I was about to do, but I couldn't just leave without at least giving them a reason.
I told them that Rodger's death, my breaking up with Tiffany and quitting the football team had all hit me hard and that I needed some time to think. I told them I'd be back and not to worry. I wasn't sure about the first and I knew the second would never happen. Guilt threatened, but there was only so much of that I could stand. In fact, I was overloaded with it recently and that was half the problem.
I slipped out of the house as quietly as I could. I had no idea where I was going or when I'd be back. I knew what I was doing was a mistake, but some mistakes you had to make. That was life.
- COMMENTS
Anonymous6 months agoMC is casanova thats banged every teenage fantasy, the milf next door, hot teacher and hot cheerleader. His thought process is more teenage then 50+ man but he is in the body of a 18 year old. And his old life was lonely why does he want to go back so much.
MarkT63about 1 year agoI don't understand why he is so homesick for his old screwed up, lonely life!!!
bigurnover 1 year agoThis is a great storyline, but so many stories on this site are about the main character being subject to angry decisions which causes them to suddenly leave. In this particular one; the MC is about to set out like a immature teenager ... Although he, supposedly has the thought processes and maturity of his adult, future self. The timeline/ reality that he now exists in is already been altered by his friends actions. He should understand that and make his own adjustments while moving forward. Just my insight and opinion.
xhristianjabout 2 years agoWhat always cracks me up is this 50+ year old guy is such a fuck up as a teenager. And seriously his compete and total immaturity is simply unbelievable. And now he's crying about going back and seriously what the fuck is he going back to he's a lard ass salesman with no wife and no family like seriously wtf?
Anonymousalmost 4 years agoThe first CD player was 1982. AIDS in the US started in 1981. Was there. Love your story, just couldn't help making the timing comment
Anonymousabout 4 years agoIt's a roller coaster... a good one, compelling, pulling me along even when my gut is roiling in unease.
Anonymousabout 5 years ago1 John's an asshole for not going to the hospital to see the opposing player that he critically injured.
2 What happened(s) in the prior timeline when John and Rodger were sent back?
mower9527about 5 years agoStarted full military power and pushing it up. Great story.
Anonymousalmost 6 years agoYou are one hell of a writer. You have great potential. If you are not already writing mainstream fiction, please consider it. I'll be first in line.
vknorrisabout 6 years agoYou have taken the time and effort to make this story so good that I don't want to stop reading till the very last chapter. Thank you
Fang1123about 8 years agoWe all come here (Literotica) for some 'hot' stories and poems and more. You have some hot parts, but your story is great. I would've even enjoyed this as a straight up book.
Sure a few spelling and grammar mistakes could be fixed, amd at times the time line of events make it seem like there is more time in a day. But truly great work. Can't wait till I finish it.
fanfareover 10 years agoThis cacophony of incompatible technology we rely upon is barely capable of relaying a coherent message. We are not surprised it fails so often, the only surprise is that it worked in the first place!
Speltczech is homophone-phobic coded by progroomers who are functionally illiterate! It is down-wrong hilarious when auto-replace functions place the wrong word in the correct context.
Punnies and malapropisms and even catachresis spice up the reading enjoyment for those of us who laugh at the pretentious nonsense palavered by the grimmer nasties. Undeniably the result of their misseducation.
If you have ever had the misfortustance to be forced to attend social functions/seminars/conferences for any Academic English Department of any institution of 'higher' learning,. You will notice that the 'educators' (with and without tenure) are divisible into three groups. Drunks, potheads and senile drunken potheads.
Academic English has got to be one of the worst methods of communication since neo-confuscianism. Noah Webster was a pre-mature fascist and Thomas Dewey was an incipient nazi.
Anonymousalmost 11 years agoresponse to deJay_13: I share your frustration at poor grammar and usage, such things can be a distraction. However when making such observations you should take care that you are not also making mistakes. Regarding #5 on your second list the correct phrase is in fact "one off" meaning something that occurs once - a simple google search will confirm this. You might say "one of these things" or similar but "one of" without something following it is not correct usage.
Regarding the story, while I have noticed some minor errors it is one of the better written stories on this site and I am enjoying it.
deJay_13about 11 years agoI am NOT a grammarian. If literature and spelling had not been incorporated with grammar in high school, I might not have passed English. I read prodigiously though.
I guess it was reading so much, especially reading good writers that has caused my abhorrence for poor usage of our language. Bad spelling and poor usage of certain words just leap out of the page to me.
This occurs mostly when reading writings of others. I simply don’t seem capable of catching the many errors in my own writings. So, with that caveat, here are a few of my “Pet Peeves”:
1. conscious and conscience are not interchangeable.
2. you’re and your are different words with different meanings.
3. they’re, their and there are also different words with different meanings.
4. pass, passed and past are also different words with different meanings.
5. then and than are also different words with different meanings.
6. cloths and clothes are also different words with different meanings.
7. to, too and two are also different words with different meanings.
8. quit, quiet and quite are also different words with different meanings.
9. brassiere and brazier are also different words with different meanings.
10. bear and bare are also different words with different meanings.
11. bier and beer are also different words with different meanings.
12. accept and except are also different words with different meanings.
13. here and hear are also different words with different meanings.
14. taught and taut are also different words with different meanings.
I won’t presume to give reasons or grammar lessons regarding the above “peeves”. Those that know the reasons would just laugh at my poor attempts. Others need the exercise in the learning process.
Some other “pet peeves” are:
1. There is no such thing as a “HOT water heater”. HOT water evidently doesn’t need to be heated. There may be some rare instances in industry or scientific laboratories where water already heated may need to be heated to a higher temperature (superheated), but the majority of “water heaters” are simply used to heat water of an ambient temperature.
2. Contrary to most Yankee opinions, us “rednecks” do not address a solitary person as “Y’ALL”. If we say to a solitary person “Y’all come to see us.” we simply mean that the invitation is extended to their entire family or organization. It’s courtesy. Something most Yankees would be unable to recognize anyway.
3. When someone says ”I could care less”, what they are really saying is “I care”. If they could care less, it is obvious they MUST care some in order to care “less”. Possibly, what they meant to say is “I couldn’t care less”. If they could not care less they are saying they have no care for the subject in the discussion.
4. When someone investigates an organization or some thing, it is often reported that they have performed “due diligence”, indicating they have thoroughly researched the matter. Occasionally, some writer will make the error of stating that “do diligence” has been performed.
5. Sometimes a person will describe an object or a happenstance as a “one off”. What they should say is that it is a “one of”. “One off” has no relevance or meaning.
6. Tense has two meanings. Stressed is one. The other one has to do with time reference, such as “past tense, present tense, etc.” It is a matter of grammar. Example: When you want to say ……… “I walked to town yesterday,” if you write “I walk to town yesterday,” it doesn’t say the same thing and only confuses the reader. Using UK or Australian grammar as an excuse doesn’t …….. wash. Grammar instructors in both nations would throw rocks at such poor excuses.
I read and enjoy a few stories on the web. It is frustrating to be reading an interesting story or research paper and get stopped or tripped up by an error which diverts attention or even distorts the thoughts of the writer.
