by Roulequin
This made me... *diamonds* I wish there was more though. I can't help but imagine Jaymin as the character James Franco played in Freaks and Geeks.
All was good except for the ending. You had me hard and leaking, this should have continued.
So beautifully written it was great, but obviously there was a lack for introduction. It's really mysterious, this short story.
the description was way over the top but strangely compelling. The ending was a bit shit, the lack of gossip and the arrest never to be seen again for no specified reason was unrealistic and the ending left me feeling unfulfilled. It seemed like you added the ending just for the sake of ensuring the story didn't have a glint of happiness which was not only dissapointing but made you feel upset for the main character.
I liked the story and the way it was told, but I felt let down at the end with no chance of a sequel. I guess I like it when there is at least a chance of it to continue. Other than that personal thought, I really like this story.
This story was not only extremely sexy, but it had a hint of sadness at the end, which I liked. Keep writing .. :)