by MAGG5
Good premise.
Sex really rushed, though.
No verbal interplay during it, just zooming ahead.
No one says anything to the other about how good what's being done to him/her feels.
No one asks if the other likes what's being dont to him/her.
No one tells the other to do something more/different.
No one asks for more of something.
He doesn't tell her she's a dirty/girl and needs to be spanked befor spanking ensues.
Four stars.
Great story and well written, you should have submitted this for an increase in your GCSE grade 😊. Many thanks for submitting, keep up the writing.
Most enjoyable, you certainly have a way with words, I look forward to reading more of your fantasies , thanks
Gave up midway with your seemingly-forever sentences & misspelling of "waving".