by MsQuote
Nice not having to read about “throbbing 8-inch cock” for a change, except in passing!
Nice erotica, although I was given pause over the mouth on cervix passage. Dude must have prehensile lips, haha!
Congratulations! The story was great and the author is both literate and a good story teller as well. Thank you. This gets an A+ from this teacher.
Thanks, Anonymous. So noted.
By the way, do you know of a good "editor" or "proofreader" I should consult before going off to that "workshop"? I'd really hate to embarrass myself any further.
Before you go to that Workshop, try getting some advice from a good Editor and the help of a good Proof Reader!!
You are right. Not that it matters a lot, but exasperated doesn't work without identifying what was made worse. You could stretch it to mean her emotional state, but exasperated fits better right away.
God I waste time!
Thanks for the good story Ms.
Exasperated is the word I think you meant when you used exacerbated.
... and as a spelling and grammar fanatic - see my stories - I found nothing wrong with your 'grammer'.
But your anatomy, or something, is a bit weak. Either you have an unusual cervix, or he has a remarkable mouth.
And if 'throbbing eight inch cock' is a stupid cliche, just what is 'tight wet pussy'?
But I'll forgive you these two wee glitches in an otherwise lovely human tale.
Anon, thanks for your feedback. I'll be sure to pay particular attention to "grammer." :)
Well Done!!! Don't want to be hyper-critical, but you could use some editing on dropped words, grammer and use of adverbs. There IS a good flow to your writing.