by BrettJ
Liked it. A few mistakes but damn it was hot. Needed a bit more hesitation between family members and more descriptive during the sex but it was good.
Excellent and hot. I did not care about the confusion on the names. So many writers who are prolific make mistakes like that.
Love the story and how it was written. Love the intensity of it.
~sigh~ In one of the stories that inspired this one, Jewel was the name of one of the characters. I based Janet on her, although the relationship to Calvin is not the same. I goofed. I will likely submit the edited version later and I thank you for spotting that. My brain must've been working wonky that day, some days, a lot of writing leads to tiny blips.
Love your work, this one included, but there were a few name changes that were confusing. 1.) After Janet blew Calvin, "Clarissa and I managed to compose ourselves..." and 2.) ""Touch it Clarissa," Jewel commanded". Who was Jewel supposed to be? Overall, great story, as always. Keep it up.