All Comments on 'Home Coming'

so much left to imagine.........................

The writing, spelling and grammar is horrible. I stopped at their food was “chard.” You need a new hobby, one that does not involve any writing.

That was an unpolished story. My apologies to any reader that was offended. I will strive to do better but I also know my best efforts are often lacking.

My next story, Finding Happiness, will be more explicit and will have a better storyline and an interesting setting, a junkyard.

Thanks for reading! Double thanks for commenting!

Never mind the anons, they just hide and spew. While you could have used an editor, the storyline was a great start. It needed to be filled out more and given a conclusion. Try for a part two and see where it goes. I’d love to read more of Brad and Mindy.

I give it a B+ for effort,but either

get an editor and/or beta reader(s)

before posting.

Also, where is the the conclusion

of this chapter? This is unfinished

and leaves the reader unsatisfied.

Tres amusing; to me, doesn’t need any follow-up. In the appropriate category too. Perhaps obviously IDK