by Cliff11
I do so enjoy stories where handsome men get caught doing something naughty. There is something so alluring about main characters who get embarrassed.
Sad to say, this is really just an introduction. As I already know there are three more chapters I'll not beg for more but really, too short!
Too much chitchat. A lot of those one or two word comments could be paraphrased as they don't really add anyting to the story and just slow things down.
You also don't identify who is saying what.
Talk about leave em wanting more!! Built the sexual tension way up there and then bailed out!! You urgently need to continue the tale, and in bigger chunks please, or we will have to ask Literotica to add a new story section called 'cock tease'!
Looking forward to this story continuing. We could be in for a bestseller type of story.
I'm looking forward to the continuation. Several interesting avenues it could take.