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P.S. time to toot my own horn, not bad for someone who hasn't written creatively in nearly 8 years. Now yell at me in the comments for being a bad author.
P.P.S. grandmaster from the future, I forgot that max was blond haired not black hair, guess I should have read the design doc more :/ and so many grammar errors.
- COMMENTS
Anonymousabout 1 year agoJust average cause no incest just mom getting hammered with a huge dick and son jacking off!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Anonymousabout 1 year agoAgreed with some of the earlier comments about numbers, spelling and grammer. Cartoonish body dimensions I can forgive because that's a fetish. But the one that kept killing the flow for me was the way they talked to each other and about themselves. Dirty talk is hot, but people don't just casually say those things to "friends" or really about themselves. And the whole interaction with the plumber was...more ridiculous than hot. The infinite money thing, whatever. But the super perfect love interest? Was with you on here getting great genetics (except the way you described it), but learning 5 martial arts, traveling, gymnastics, going to school. No one has that kinda time my guy. That's not even close to believable. This is fantasy, sure, but to engage a reader who wants to insert their perception INTO that fantasy, it has to at least make some forms of sense as a framework and then you can go nuts with whatever magic spell, chemical formula, nanotech, alien experiment, go nuts. But have somewhere we can at least start to get immersed in.
Whipmasterabout 1 year agoSwitching from first person singular to second or third destroyed the flow of the story. Try sticking with one.
LordXavier21about 1 year agoYou ruined it with the slutty mother. Fuckin pissed me right off. I came here for some incest. Not only did i not get it but i was subjected to whatever the fuck that was. I have never gone from hard to soft so fast in my life
greenreaderover 1 year agoYou're a bad author for giving Kelly 44 inch ass and leaving mom with 38 inches. Other than that its a good start GrandmasterBlast. Keep it up. I'll give you 5 stars and hope mom gets more screen time.
PS. Pay attention to upper-case letter when referring to Max.
