All Comments on 'Homebound Ch. 06'

Love the story as usual.

Think you need to do an editing pass for spelling and grammar before you post as there are a few mistakes here and there. I think you can run it all through Grammarly online easily enough. Not 100% sure though.

Please keep posting!

You need an editor. Getting way too over the top for me.

As others have mentioned, you severely need an editor. I like the story, but the repeated tangents about overly specific things (like the watches and Floom) distract from the story. It's extra information that ultimately adds nothing to the story.

I loved this so far. I wonder what other kind of maybe Kelly could stir up now that she's in the picture.

If you want my personal opinion, though, I'm waiting for the chapter Max decides to plow his mom right that massive ass of hers. If he owns her, he might as well take every hole, as far as I'm concerned.

Can Grammar Nazis please shut up.