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by Willsdrall

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AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Wow

You had an interesting premise and you write well. BUT, a good writer also organizes what he writes and remembers that his readers deserve to follow what he is saying. Your abrupt and almost random shifts among dialogue, mental muings and philosophy become so twisted that I am not sure you even realize that your story did not have an ending. Also, who is Lisa?

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