by jomar
The story was good (if lacking in descriptive writing. The whole "show, don't tell")
But the ending was just boring and bad.
For a TRUE horror story, a better ending is how he somehow escaped and "is still out there, his deluded mind searching for his nex wife...and victim." --or something like that.
And it was sadly little sex for a literotica story. (Then again, I have a thing for serial killers, and find this still kinda hot. Lol)
It was quirky and interesting. Yes, the style was a little odd, but I think it enhanced the story.
Don't you just love these light, comedic horror classics. I'm hoping in my next life I get to live in one.
HA
There is a stealthy unease in the story, making me wonder who was truly responsible for the incidents that occurred. Nice take on the classic "haunted house" stories.
Well crafted story, a classic piece of gothic writing. My one quibble (the pedantic side comes out!) is "Maxwell's" should not have the apostrophe. But I'll not vote you down for that.
An interesting short tale. Your grasp of language is outstanding, but I did not enjoy your writing style which became in short length too passive because of the narrative style. I also would have liked less "dear reader" and the excessive use of questions. Apart of that, it was a good story.