All Comments on 'House of Glass'

The only positive thing I can write about this whatever-it-is: It's mercifully short.

FTDS!!!

Stories usually have a beginning, a middle, and an end. Did you intend to write an actual story?

We know what’s next since you portrayed hubby as weak and pathetic. Kill himself over a selfish and evil slut? Really dumb. Another writer making all men stupid and meek, while making all wives whores with no consequences. Guess that’s the type of relationship they need to get excited. Nonsense

What was this? 2 stars, only because it started out ok!

Where is the ending?

Continue story , maybe him jumping out in rage screaming at them childish vile name. Then have him leave saying I need to think a few days . He changes his accounts to him alone , change all beneficiaries to other family if he has . Get info from sluts as two years they have been traveling but it sounds like his whore wife has been a pig all along. No divorce but he needs to tell them you pay household bills I’m heading out for some time to reflect on what I need and try to build back up my fragile male ego. Maybe fuck a few sluts like you two to help with that. To consider putting home on market because it’s to big and probably soiled by your whore ways and yes I did see your naked whore pictures. Could never walk down the asile with you in a white dress being your as pure as yellow snow. If you sell before I return just move my stuff either with you or storages and leave spare room empty for me . I’d advise on full std tests because I’m going for one and will name you both as possibly infected. Real agent yo split profits and will send me mine , if new home is purchased with your money put in your name only and will settle upon my Return. I’m sending half the child slut money for college tuition but shouldn’t as she could pay with her whore ass. No talking over a year before return only text specific responses and move back home but live separately in sleeping travel etc. , no more family nights out , no gifts from him on holidays and never accepting one from them. He keeps hook ups hidden in public but not secret from them even fucking a few college girls . It could be a real interesting continuation of this , give it a go

"at 40 she looked almost 20"... started laughing at that point, any attempt to take this seriously totally over. It's a cliche, in about 30,000 stories here, and total bullshit.

A folder labeled "KEEP OUT" ??? Seriously? *cackle* That's like a bank robber leaving a note that says, "whatever you do, don't contact the man in this photo about this crime... with a copy of his DL picture.

This cheating skank and her slut daughter need to find their asses on the street soonest.

It should have ended with Sarah and Melissa hearing a gunshot.

Now that you have the idea for a good story please write it. My only concern is you seem to want to make the husband somewhat wimpy. Give him a set of balls and let him set these two bitches straight.

Next chapter line. A mother and daughter were swimming off the coast of Australia and eaten by a Great White....

This is a classic example of what the 750 word project has created. Instead of actual stories we get story outlines.

As a new author you have done yourself no favor leaving your readers hanging. This one gets a 1* - any others you write will be looked on with a very disparaging view. Treat your readers with respect.

I guess you like to be beat up, otherwise you would not have published this inadequate cliff hanger. Regular 750 stories have some form of resolution. The main character spent 4 days moaning about his life and wondering what to do because he still loved his wife. What a trope

Is this one of those postings with the sole purpose to piss people off?

I mean... where's the story? Where's the actual plot? All this "story" contains is a hard working man who has his world crushed by the women in his life, who then even go on to complain about fragile male egos. Then simply stops to leave the reader in that heightened state of anger over their actions because there is no resolution, no justification, and no consequences of any kind. All we see is the man suffering.

This whole thing seems downright designed to provoke angry comments. And that from an "author" who, despite writing perfectly formed paragraphs without any obvious typos, never wrote anything else?

But, yeah, I'm sure the comments will somehow prove your point, after you created something TRYING to agitate whoever reads it.

To everyone, thank you for your feedback. I will finish the story. For all the people posting negative comments about the characters, I probably agree with you. An author doesn't necessarily only write characters that he agrees with, that would be very boring.

Man, those hoes are evil

Having come to this late, thankfully, I can only add my disdain to your other commentators.

Why is it that hubby spends four days feeling sorry for himself whilst wife and daughter are away? The evidence in front of him is irrefutable that they are a pair of skanks who have no respect for him at all.

He just rolls over like a little pathetic puppy dog. Give him some balls for heaven’s sake.

Chapter 2?

Strange how the vast majority of these stories, no one ever catches or transmits a serious STD, which would be far more realistic than RAAC or BTB.

let's take a look at what was said out of their own mouths. She talks about his male ego that can not be reasoned with, he can not satisfy her desire, and men beholden to their pride. Add to that the daughter's comment of including him. 1and they keep trophy pics of their adventures. Yet she says there is no malice or contempt in their actions when her words say the opposite?

Story has promise but the dialogue is awful. Completely explanatory for a hiding third person, and not at all the way people familiar with the topic would talk. Read it outloud to yourself.

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I find it hard to believe that any man could be clueless that his wife cheats when there is so much as appears here.

"Sarah: But you are never to reveal any of this to your father. His male ego cannot handle it and cannot be reasoned with. I don't say this with any malice or contempt, it is a matter of male biology..." —— These are the types of things that are said by someone who knows they are in the wrong but are trying to rationalize their actions. They demean the party that they are offending by their actions in an attempt to make themselves appear enlightened and forward thinking. Woke, if you will. It reveals nothing more than the fact they are self-centered narcissist.

OMG WHAT UTTER UTTER RUBBISH!

Meh. And again with the "male ego." Lie her "female ego" could take her husband having lovers.

My biggest complaint with just about all stories of this type is that you don't become a senior partner with sufficient billables to consider retiring in your early 40's by being an indecisive wimp.

At the very least the thought "No more trips or vacations on my dime!" would have come up.

Keep mouth shut.

Move to an at fault state by any means possible. Maybe one that allows alienation of affection if you possibly can and if you could then get a PI to find out as many of her past partners as you can.

Throw a huge ceremony. Invite the press and all her affair partners along with all her family. Have it live streamed. Never show up. Turn lights off and have a movie start playing with photos and videos of their family with some sappy music. Then a record scratch plays and screen goes white unexpectedly. On the white screen in big bold blocky black text says "Everyone in this room are people that my wife cheated on me with"

In the dark the curtains on the walls are raised. The lights go back on to reveal every photo of the wife cheating blown up and framed.

Next it's revealed that every single partner she had was assigned a seat to a specific process server who say "You've been served" in unison . A process server crawls out from under the table on stage in front of his wife and has her served. Then crawls back under the table escaping through a hidden trap door just to fuck with her even more. The screen starts showing a live feed from 4 different body cams of people severing individuals that couldn't make it to the ceremony. As soon as one is done it changes to another.

Play video containing a complication of all her exploits she stupidly had filmed. Blur out what's necessary to avoid trouble. Play the video muted at 2x speed with yakety sax playing on full blast.

Never speak to her or the daughter ever again.

What a load of bollocks

Pride? No. It’s betrayal and loss of trust. Women like them shouldn’t get married. If the urges become uncontrollable after marriage, at least show him the respect of giving him the choice before the fact.

I guess theres a story , but the writings AWFUL