All Comments on 'House of Pain Ch. 05-06'

what an awesome chapter, @funinthesungirl19!

my favorite of yours so far, and that's saying something 'cuz i really like all of them!

really outstanding work. thank you!

Loving it as usual

And now another teasing little cliffhanger .

How lucky we all are to have so many decent writers at the moment...bliss

... of one of my favourite stories! Very well done, funinthesungirl19, as ever - please keep them coming! Five stars and a huge TY.

Oh my, yes!

Liking the pace you have set. The continuity of the characters' actions and thoughts is good. Her inner dialogue is especially excellent-doubts and desire in appropriate amounts. The action is erotic and enjoyably believable, with no 'magical' body parts on anyone. I like how you have constructed Doug, confident but not arrogant. Not going full bore dungeon scene was a great choice. We will all get to enjoy the build up.

I can understand her reticence at becomming a submissive to Doug, which in essence, regardless of what anybody says, she would be giving up her freedom, independence and identity. I do not understand why her parting thoughts should be "I am in so much trouble", she has made no commitment to him, an arrangement for a 'date' in a few days time is no commitment to a long term relationship. Hope she stays true to herself.

@Anonymous - keep watching! Totally agree about what you said; she's made no commitments indeed. Keep watching, you are going to love the next set of chapters! (Hint - the topic in your comment comes up!)

I Love your work. I like the chemistry between Doug and Sara. I love the way it skyrockted to intense as the chapter went on. I noticed that you posted Chapter 5 and 6 at the same time. Does that mean the end of the story is coming? I sure hope not. Great job. :D

I wholeheartedly agree. Best chapters yet, and that's saying a lot because they follow some pretty amazing writing. Looking oh so forward to more!

More please . . .

And looking forward to the next segment.

Thank you for sharing and please continue the story.

First and most importantly, thanks so much for the compliments; I'm blushing, and grateful all at once.

Second, I've submitted Chapters 7 and 8 - did that a couple of days ago. Hopefully, it'll be posted soon to Lit.

However, if you are impatient, and want to read more, there are 16 chapters + an epilogue to the story. Not all the chapters will end on Lit, but the story is available on the Kindle store.

http://www.amazon.com/House-Pain-BDSM-Romance-Novel-ebook/dp/B00GPSVRZS/

I recognize there's a lot of free erotica, and you might think - why bother to pay? But authors need to live too, and money helps for that. Thanks for reading!

First I want to apologise for my language. my native language is dutch (flemish) so it is very possible I make mistakes.

What i really want to tell is that in your stories, you have a beautifull balance between the exiting story and a very good use of your language.

When reading, i sometimes wonder if you experienced enjoying to be a submissive ?

This means you create a very possible story in a captivating style of writing. THX

Wow, good cliff-hanging ending. So, is Doug the possessive, jealous type? Inquiring minds wish to know. Really nice series. Congratulations.

Well fungirl, up until the last half-page, I figured many of he questions I had raised in comments in the last chapter, were now mostly answered. But that Sara chose to go back to do another show for John, without at least notifying Doug, is sounding warning klaxons!

Trust takes effort by both sides, both persons. Trust has to be given and trust has to be accepted. If Doug cannot believe in Sara, if she fails to communicate with him. this has to be a danger signal. The Dom has to know that the sub is being honest.

Now my other personal bete noir. Anal sex, sorry butt I just do not understand so many peoples fascination with taking it up the poop chute. My wife's mother and stepfather were notorious rascals and swingers long before it was popular. After he died in a motorcycle accident, my mother-in-law, deprived of his control, rather went wild and engaged in many unsafe sex practices.

The result was anal and uterine prolapse. You do NOT want to view those Youtubes on a full stomach. My wife had to help "tuck" her mother's internals back in on a regular basis until she was willing to have surgery. Frankly, I blame the orgiastic abuses the woman engaged in for her health problems that resulted in early senility and kept her bedridden for the last ten years of her life. With that example neither my wife nor I had any enthusiasm for anal sex. And this was back before drug-resistant hepatitis, HIV and AIDS.

Well fungirl, up until the last half-page, I figured many of he questions I had raised in comments in the last chapter, were now mostly answered. But that Sara chose to go back to do another show for John, without at least notifying Doug, is sounding warning klaxons!



Trust takes effort by both sides, both persons. Trust has to be given and trust has to be accepted. If Doug cannot believe in Sara, if she fails to communicate with him. this has to be a danger signal. The Dom has to know that the sub is being honest.



Now my other personal bete noir. Anal sex, sorry butt I just do not understand so many peoples fascination with taking it up the poop chute.

My wife's mother and stepfather were notorious rascals and swingers long before it was popular. After he died in a motorcycle accident, my mother-in-law, deprived of his control, rather went wild and engaged in many unsafe sex practices.



The result was anal and uterine prolapse. You do NOT want to view those Youtubes on a full stomach. My wife had to help "tuck" her mother's internals back in on a regular basis until she was willing to have surgery.

Frankly, I blame the orgiastic abuses the woman engaged in for her health problems that resulted in early senility and kept her bedridden for the last ten years of her life. With that example neither my wife nor I had any enthusiasm for anal sex. And this was back before drug-resistant hepatitis, HIV and AIDS.

read a chapter yet that was anything but excellent! Gotta go read more...thanks!

This is the film that needs produced, not sequels to 50 Shades. What turns me on the most is that you probably are drawing at least in part from your personal journey, trained appetites and 19yo fetishes.

I wish she loves herself a bit more, be a little more proud