All Comments on 'How a Girl falls in Love'

Bravo! That was such a hot narrative I would have never thought it was your first submission. Congrats.

I really enjoyed the sexual tension and the lovemaking description

This was really sweet! I liked that the guy was a bit older and actually attractive, not a gross old man. Loved the emotions

Nice story but there was no tension - we thought we knew where we were going and we were right - not a single bump in the road

I scored it a 3 for the simple reason that your first story wasn't another pile of cuck garbage or helping to further the bbc myth. It was cute but rushed, slow down, give the story time to build. Good luck with your next entry.

You seemed to have gotten Janet & Jenny's names mixed up a couple of times. But sweet story

I like the story but would have felt better about it if some mention of protection had been present. All to often, "young love" end in disaster due to unplanned pregnancy.

Good story I liked the ending needed a lil more maybe slower penetration more build up to pop cherry time for her to relax and get use to cock being at the various levers and maybe wait till pain is gone then start the sex. That what I like but I am no written so good job

great story!

I would've preferred if she got more attention. No way she'd have an orgasm without clitoral stimulation, poor woman. And the pain? It should've gone much slower. If she was warmed up with fingers first she wouldn't have had such pain. I feel kind of sorry for her. Also, did they not discuss protection? A little presumptuous of him to finish inside of her without checking first. That's not an OK thing for him to do.

It's very sweet, though. I'm glad he's not also a virgin. That always makes me roll my eyes right out of my head. Slow down your stories a bit, but it's promising.

Lay down, not lied down.

I lovely story of how it is when 2 people fall in love, as opposed to lust. I look forward to your next story.