All Comments on 'How I Became My Mom's Date Ch. 02'
by bigjimbroni65
- 8 Comments
Anonymousover 5 years agoCould continue. Unless the sister gets involved you don't have much to work with. Another direction may be pregnancy but not sure. Shouldve fleshed out the characters more and slow buildup would have presented many directions for sequels. Try for slow buildup if you want multiple parts with same characters or you could introduce new characters which won't work for this particular setting, if you want to write only over the top sexual scenarios then it could work but you obviously aren't going for it. Good story nonetheless. Keep Writing.
1D9O5M9over 5 years agoI don't have any suggestions for where to go with this story, I will say I like your writing style.
Anonymousover 5 years agoTheir first baby will be an accident, but the second will be on purpose!
DoctorSpenglerover 5 years agoThe use of phrases. Instead of complete sentences. Ruined a halfway decent. Story.
ROCKY70almost 5 years agoThis part hit the spot, i'am 72 yo and had a hard on all of page 2 . Eating her pussy was like the greatest story ever told. Another great read. THANKS
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