by krys1lvs2read
Much better that many other's first attempts, maybe a little draggy in places but that is better than a wham, bam, thank you ma'am. Keep writing.
Both your readers and also your characters deserve more.
Puleese.
It's been over 7 months since you wrote this. I hope this isn't the end. I think you have a gift for writting, and I would like to see more.
she's on - husband 7???!!!!!!! what will happen when she does
learn about what's going on... hahahahahahahaha... no more
- husband 7... she'll only want one thing... hahahahahahaha
I like the subtle and erotic work up of them playing around with each other before they have sex, and it seems that they are really hot for each other, and even love each other more than they really should, so I hope that they finally consummate their sexual union soon.
Thanks for the good read.
It was okay, Delete this as a "pt 2" and make it another page on the first submission.
Nothing but praise here--just be sure to get another installment soon where Mike really "nails" Khrystie. ;)
Great job! You are a talented writer; you are nailing the pacing. Keep it up!
Need more!! Too short!! Too sweet. So very delicious and addictive!! Hurry please!!!!!!!!!