by TMONY1
I thought the story great but the ending was a total letdown. You give the mom total independence and happyness with her son then send her back to her awful husband. She should have told her son to back out and let's go find a lawyer. I guess you must be the same as her husband. A loser.
While at a gas station Cody buys a lottery ticket. He wins. Then he “buys” Tori from Jim. Negotiating the price and other terms could be great. Jim says Tori only wants to be a whore. She agrees, telling him she will be a one cock whore. Fini.
I’ve enjoyed this series, and I sure hope you’ll continue. I do think you need some variety -some spice to the story. You implied a couple of times that Tori was beginning to get turned on to the attention of other men and women, so I think adding a women (maybe one of her work mates, or other woman) - although Cody and Tori are totally devoted to each other (great love story) - adding another woman might spruce things up a bit.
Thanks again…you’ve written a very sensual love story - I hope you will continue!
There's too much sex between the trickling of plot development, which drags it out. Is this the end of the story? There's so much more left to tell. Hope this isn't it. Such a disappointment if so. I hate when authors can't finish what they started. Such a beta move.
It does feel like this was a bit rushed and the author was trying to wrap things up. Randomly throw in that the husband was cheating, with let's say his secretary or whoever she is, for 3 years. I mean it explains why he's basically checked out of the marriage and projects onto Tori a bit (guilt symptoms). I still find that it feels a tad forced as a means to wrap things up quickly. Hopefully the author hasn't abandoned this story for good and comes back to give it closure.
Are you ever going to finish this good story? It would be nice to know so your fans can go to sleep at night without wondering about your two heroes.
Excellent story, but needs to be taken to its conclusion. When can we expect the next instalment?
Mike (UK)
There definitely needs to be one more chapter to this story. Way to many loose ends to tie up.