All Comments on 'Hunting Season Ch. 02'

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ConstructiveConstructiveabout 1 year ago

Well written will break, well done!

However I personally don't like the idea of him selling her, if you get your readers invested in a character you should keep her as part of a harem.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 1 year ago

Pretty good story, some formatting mistakes early in the chapter, but overall good. However, I do agree with the previous commenter that Songbird getting sold doesn't feel right. I could see him using her as a living weapon if you're going for a more proper super villain storyline than the classic erotic harem archetype, but it still makes more sense to keep her, at least in my opinion.

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Loving getting the ideas in my head out for you to enjoy. If you have a suggestion add it in a comment, I have incorporated reader suggestions in previous stories.

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