All Comments on 'Husband Has a Limit'

Rarely does an author open up their fragile egos for all to examine.

The characterisation of the 'female dominant' relationship is so warped and 2d that it is about the equivalent of saying that a 'male dominant' relationship is about getting drunk on Friday and Saturday nights and beating the wife. Having affairs with other women and getting them pregnant.

It happens more often than we'd like to admit, but only a fool would suggest that it even comes close to accurately representing how such relationships actually work. And it conveniently ignores the fact that men for hundreds of years dominated and grossly mismanaged their relationships and families.

Its ironic really, because I seriously doubt, going from their other stories, that the author believes in equal (by default feminist) relationships, and thereby unwittingly provides by counter example why so many 'traditional' marriages fail.

Too many posters are putting the boot into the author for 'supporting and believing in female supremacy'. I would suggest that you all pay proper attention to what you are reading. In the preface to this story Lover1953 quite clearly states that he is sceptical about this philosophy and is convinced that a relationship built on it could not survive.

If you didn't like the story then it is your prerogative to award it a low and share with us all why you didn't like it. What is not justifiable is to accuse L1953 of supporting this movement and to abuse him for it when it was not him but one of his characters, Olivia who spouts her BS and support for this toxic concept. Wise up, people and pay attention to the plot.

JR

This idea of Fem-Dom marriage may be interesting to authors but it is pure fantasy, and piss poor one at that, to the male audience . As far as I am concerned it is a waste of my time, the author’s time, and of any mature adults time.

Hmm Jacob pushed the boundaries of true love too far. I agree with the consensus, he should have ripped apart the contract - the marriage contract should have sufficed.

“When her baby was born, Olivia had listed Jacob as the father on the birth certificate”

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Should have pressed charges against her for paternity fraud. Sure, the DA won’t want to prosecute, but you can still embarrass her, and the DA!

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ZK

Like the ending but Jacob took way too long to wise up! I agree with others, he should have torn up the contract , thrown it in her face and written out a new, fair and equal contract for her to sign. “Take it or leave it, “ma’m.”

I know these stories are fiction but this one was just way out there. I cannot imagine anyone I have ever known being stupid enough to sign the contract described in this story.

Fucking rubbish. Jacob is a stupid little bitch for even accepting her to fuck other men. Pure fucking rubbish. If I could give it a minus 10, I would.

Well I read the story from start to finish. There wasn’t any, emphasize ANY, surprises, as the author telegraphed how it was going to end.

For many of us femdom is attractive and interesting. When a man and a woman decide together to give her dominance, in a loving, caring marriage. Where trust abounds. Where intimacy increases. Where the wife wants a husband, not a slave. Where humor lives between them. Where they keep this relationship special, just between themselves.

But when an outside lover becomes involved, the whole relationship is cheapened. It’s no longer special anymore. J.

The FemDom concept is both laughable and abhorrent at the same time. Jacob should have torn up the “contract” and thrown the pieces in Olivia’s face when she presented it to him! “Wedding’s off Olivia, but, hey, thanks for being upfront and all about the cheating!”

If they did get married, the first time she got the paddle out, he should have let her lay one and only one swat on him, then get up, take her paddle away and put her over his knee for ten swats, each one 10 times as hard as hers and tell her in no uncertain terms, “whatever you throw at me, you will get it back at you 100 times over! This time, I know what’s best for us and it ain’t this shit!!”

Waiting for the inevitable black baby to show up and make Jacob wise up was WAY too long in coming!

The author’s attempt to either justify or support the concept of her fem lifestyle, is asinine and ridiculous, thus are all that support such a stupid and baffling notion. Just remember to keep love in the relationship u til all else devolves around you. Great philosophy, asshole. Look around you, YOU ARE,THE,EFFINMPROBLM, BRAIN DEAD INDIOT.

Very nice story..I also like this comment. From another reader. Thank you for the story. I can relate. It reminds me of my marriage to my fat-ass wife. Always wanted to control my life after we were married and had 2 amazing kids. She controlled everything in her life except the food she shoved in her bloated jowls. My daughter is 17, my son is 13, and im biding my time to dump her cottage-cheese ass.

Sucked

Thank you for the story. I can relate. It reminds me of my marriage to my fat-ass wife. Always wanted to control my life after we were married and had 2 amazing kids. She controlled everything in her life except the food she shoved in her bloated jowls. My daughter is 17, my son is 13, and im biding my time to dump her cottage-cheese ass.

I am a native American, I want all you interloper to go back were you came from.

An't gonna happen.

I am black I want to be paid for all the suffering my people have gone through in this country.

An't gonna happen.

I am a woman and you and the rest of you kind had better shut up before men star asking for equal rights, think about it. Divorce courts, employment, housing, single men do not fair well. A single name parent has a harder time keeping his children, than does a Crack whore. Why it's just how the system is designed. This is coming from someone that worked inside the system until it drove him out. This story is not that far fetch from som of the s__t I have seen.

Absolute load of rubbish

To me it’s an odd sort of story, but it’s yours to write, it didn’t hold together for me, but to far out from life.

So, reading the story to the end made it a bit more palatable, but as anon said about a month ago, the fact that MC actually signed such a document made him distasteful. I know he had to in order to make the story, but I am just having such a hard time imagining anyone actually signing that kind of document unless they were already in a full blown relationship that included a cuckolding fetish. And if that were the case, the story doesn’t work.

Yeah I guarantee that you loose your readers when they loose any and all respect for the MC, the little things can be accepted but the moment he signed her garbage femdom contract, it's all over he garners zero respect and nobody cares for someone they don't respect, so why read a story about someone you don't like, you see where I'm going, add to the fact that the opening of the story has zero FACTS one might argue less than zero because what is stated is 100% false- outright lies, oh oh, did that trigger if so please state one thing whether physical, or mental whether game, or sport, that is judged by objective reality not subjective that women beat men?

Can't believe I read this drivel.

great ending, although the ending was too long.

Hell no!!!

Too long a wimpy cuckold!!

Too late to claim your manhood as still no btb.

Home run! A tremendous hit piece on the foolishness that is destroying western culture. It reveals that the nonsensical drivel that is so popular is nothing but extreme selfishness cloaked with words to make it sound like something that is the opposite of its true nature.

In its own way this is as socially significant as books like 1984.

Tolerance of foolishness is not a kindness, it is social suicide.

The Hoary Cleric

There were no consequences for the wife's lover? The MC may draw the line at raising a bastard child, but he is still a weak, impotent boy.

These stories are fun to read but the whole woman hating ethos is a little scary.

He was such a wimp. No man would sign such a vile document.

Well, at the end Jacob finally saw the light and got out of the relationship. The story was plausible since Olivia was a loving Domme with him after punishing him and then giving fantastic aftercare by putting on numbing cream, or having fantastic sex, or both. THe contract was for her to love him and take care of him and she did that. Where she broke the contract was having a kid by another man. The contract was ok for her to take lovers from time to time but nothing about having a kid. Yes, a man will kill to protect his children however the children have to be his children (oh, yes, adopted kids need the same protections but that is not the issue here). Too bad that Olivia could not end up with another husband to help her mend her femdom psychology and move on with her life. Of course, Jacob ends up in a loving relationship and finally ends up marrying Kelly.

again..a wimpy writers ballless ending!

great story. i didn't like the ending. i would've had Olivia go up to the roof and jumped to her death, leave the baby an orphan. but with Jacob soft heart and his past love for Olivia, kelly and him adopted Olivia's baby as it wasn't the babies fault for what his mother did..

So, where are we now in society? After 60 years of feminism, marriage rates are dropping. Have u ever heard a fem. Ali campaign or push for female selective service or draft? Equality , right? Do women usually buy fiancé a 20 k engagement ring? According to a study in 2015, national survey of food servers,maitre d restaurant mgr,men still pay 90 percent of checks. Equality right? Female assault against men has increased to equal levels, although men often do not report it. Female assault also usually involves a weapon, knife, thrown object etc, while male assault is most often shoving , pushing Or hitting. Equality right? Marriages like the one here do exist, and cuckolding is becoming more mainstream as women groups are pushing for it. Every generation has less testosterone than the previous going back a century. It is also tru e that in 1920, life expectancy for both genders was equal. 100 years later men have slipped to eight years less,and the curve appears to be widening. A recen article discussed the increasingly common occurrence of women fondling,grabbing or simply sticking hands down men's pants to evaluate what they'd find. 2800 incidents and none were prosecuted. If the gender roles were reversed , all of them would have men in jail. Women do this in clubs to avoid wasting time in their nightly hookups., while getting men to pay for free drinks and food. Nice, huh? All about equality according to fems

I can't imagine that there are two idiots like your protagonists in this world!

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I couldn’t read it, I just skimmed it, just too silly to be interesting ⭐️

Great. A lover1953 story without assorted narrators

Didn't really get her final feelings at the end. How did it impact her beliefs?

the misogynistic crap in the comments are amusing, i wonder what they would say if it was the other way around. thanks for the story

The meeting between Olivia and Jacob at the conclusion of the story is oldly sterile. Both characters are fairly wooden and with no expressed emotion. This does not ring true. Kelly has traveled a long distance with a young child in order to see her ex and make her convincing pitch to reconcile with him. She should be tired, anxious, sorrowful and nonetheless resentful. Alas, she is none of these. He has been blindsided by her arrival and has to resent the shit out of the fact she brought her bastard child to his new workplace after he moved so far in order to get away from her betrayal and disrespect. His demeanor, however, is cool and polite if perhaps a bit abrupt. Maybe they are pod creatures.

I wonder how many people, male and female, have been destroyed by toxic feminism? It's a plague on our society.

Thank you creating two of the dumbest idiots in this story. I hope there are no males willing to be totally dominated by any woman, except may their mother. No person should ever feel they have the right to dominate/control another. No woman and no man has that right, end of fucking statement. Writing was mildly interesting but the emphasis on female domination was too over the top for this reader. Why is it in Loving Wives?

I understand the story was intended to show the idiocy of a "Female Led Relationship", but with due respect for your effort, it is poorly written. Wooden dialogue and narration, one dimensional characters who are too stupid to be real. Try again maybe but this one is dreadful.

The way discipline is used in this story and I assume in this kind of lifestyle is not real discipline. Real discipline is not a power game. Real discipline is to help develop children into proper successful contributing members of society. When little Jimmy breaks a neighbors window, his discipline might be to have him apologize, and pay for a new window out of his allowance. The kind of "discipline" shown in this story needs to be relabeled.

While the words were well written, the story was not. It read, blah, blah, blah, blah, words, blah, more words. The subject is not even an issue. Also, a flash story is a short story, this is neither. 2*

Dumb

This story wound up ok, but was very frustrating to read. Going over and over and over the evils and discrepancies of a female led relationship just got to be too much. The audience agrees with you- move on.

Outlandish.

A relationship was never meant to be equal.

I don't half do one thing, and let the other person do half. It's stupid beyond measure. And most 'modern intellectuals' believe that equal means whatever is good is divided equally, and whatever is 'icky' the MAN has to still do.

BUT relationships do NEED love and respect. A lot of it in fact. That means open communication, and no manipulation. And both partners agree to SHARE responsibility based on that love and open dialogue. Yes...most men are stronger.....and most women are emotionally smarter. So the men will typically handle the labor intensive stuff, and women usually handle bureaucratic chores. It's complimentary. This was a good story about a selfish cake-eater that victimized a stupid man. He wised up, and has a healthy life. She, on the other hand, is left paying for her choices.

BDSM is fine privately, or in the bedroom, hell, it can even be a steady lifestyle between consenting people, BUT when you start you use it as a venue of cheating, of blindsiding your partner, of a way to gain control of your partner in unsavoury ways that undermine that person's principal rights and safety, that is when you cross a line no real dominant would ever want to cross, deliberately or unintentionally.

As a story and a piece of fiction, this is excellent plotting. 4/5

Well written storey but I don’t like the subject. Gave it a 2.

Femdom might be okay when it involves a couple and it stays completely private, but when other people are brought into their lives it always ends up with abuse and total disrespect.

You write well and are creative. I found myself skipping some just to get through. You have a talent that I don't have. Keep writing.

It's nice to see a story where you can discern between a loving D/s relationship and abuse. No matter how strong your fetishes are and how submissive you think you are, you always deserve to be treated with decency, respect, trust. I am submissive and believe I have found the right mix of fetish and love with my partner, but it's always a slippery slope when cuckolding or excessive control are considered.

WOW never seen so many comments! I thought it was well written and didn't go the way these normally go where the guy puts up with it and ends up as a maid serving her and her lover.

If anyone got into this situation this is what would happen. Any man or woman that would put up with being treated like that would have no self esteem.

Like the femdom future stories. Fun to read, but very unlikely. We are biologically programmed (well most of us are) Women want strong(not always physical) men who will look after them when they are vulnerable, like pregnancy. Men want as the author said to pass on their genes and see them thrive.

There is a lot of nonsense spoke about the Y chromosome going extinct , as is has lost genes. Some feminists loved this. It has not lost any genes in 25 million years. Those that are lost were unused.

I can honestly see marriages becoming more equal, but often women want a more traditional form.

FLR is really only for a very small group of people and fantasy.

Olivia got pissed when she went back home.

She tracked down the sperm donor and forced him to take give a DNA sample. When he proved to be the father which he knew it but had deserted her anyway, she took him for maximum child support.

The sperm donor basically lived his life in penury as the child support was not set at HIS income but the income of the ex-husband (yeah I know this won't happen but so what) and seeing as the ex-husband was earning heaps the child support was set at 26% (before tax) of heaps.

Whatever the merits or demerits of this story are, the author has to be credited with producing what is perhaps the most stupid (or inadvertently funny)line published on this site. When the protagonist sees the newborn, the author has him asking: " Why is my baby black?" Perhaps a line should have followed explaining about the birds and the bees!

Utterly disappointing CUCK story till the very end... Glad he overcame his mental illness.

It's nice to see a story where the husband rebels against the silly flr. To those who say that dominated husbands, chastity cage wearers, and other non manly types are all just wimps who should man up, i say its not easy to man up. You are what you are based on your childhood experiences and a host of factors. If you were bullied abused, or have any type of anxiety disorder manning up is virtually impossible. What needs to happen for men's rights to be accepted as women's rights haveb een. We must rebel against the false alpha beta construct. Its a false dicotomy. There aren't just two types of men. Both the virile alpha and the wimp beta are just characatures. The fake alphas are the ones that show up at rallies in body armor and lots of weapons. They are invariably white middle aged and agrieved. Lets get away from that. We also need to get away for the other end where men hold their wifes purse for her and say nothing but yes dear. Im rambling, but what i mean is men need to start ditching the alpha beta trope and say no to sexism toward males if we have any hope of defining manhood on our terms.

Let there be another chapter where Olivia gets the rapings and beatings she deserves.

One aspect that seems a bit odd to me is that both see the marriage contract as an all-or-nothing choice.

From the later part of the story, Jacob is clearly not OK with the part that allows Olivia to have sexual relations with other men.

While Jacob clearly has objection to the contract, he only asks Olivia to marry him without the contract. Why doesn't he try to negotiate and change the parts of the agreement that are beyond his limit?

Another wimp,how long would he have stayed married if she hadn't got pregnant.

Another EXCELLENT story! You did an excellent job of explaining the fallacies and pitfalls of these "loving" relationships where one partner is essentially chattel. It's more like Sharia with XX-chromosomes.

The story had very little action for 4 pages of text, and way too much gabbing about femdom.

I was basically skipping huge chunks just to get to the points of any interest.

Olivia was waiting to be told she could start the wedding march down the aisle but she had just been told the Groom and his entourage had not shown up yet. She was steadily getting more and more angrier.

After half an hour the Priest had come and said he needed to move on as there was another wedding in an hour.

She asked her father to hand her her phone so she could ring Jacob to find out when he would get there.

She rang him and with barely concealed anger asked him why he was not there. She had it on speaker phone and her father heard the conversation.

She said to Jacob it was their wedding day and he was already late. When Jacob said No it was his enslavement day and he would not become a slave to anyone Olivia lost it and started to abuse Jacob. When Jacob calmly told her he was going to hang up if she kept up the abuse her father then got involved.

He asked Jacob what he meant by enslavement. Jacob explained what the contract she enticed him to sign was all about BUT seeing as it did not take effect till after they were married he was using the exit clause from the relationship.

Her father then asked her what Jacob meant by the contract and Olivia explained all about the FemDom marriage contract. Her father exploded and callled her a stupid fucking bitch. The whole church heard this and Olivia's mother came to find out what was wrong. When Olivia's father explained to her mother what had happened her mother just shook her head and stated that her FemDom beliefs were bullshit and a marriage is an equal partnership not one of dominance.

The Priest then came and said that seeing as the Groom had not shown up he was cancelling the wedding and that everyone had to leave the church.

Olivia's father then went to the front of the church and explained that his stupid daughter was not going to be married that day due to her stupid FemDom beliefs.

He then told everyone to go to the reception hall anyway as it was all paid for so they may as well enjoy the free feed.

When Olivia got home she found that Jacob had removed all his possessions from the house and left her a note in which he explained he was not going to be subservient to her in anyway shape or form.

On Monday she rang Jacob's work and was told he had left the area and had a new job on the other side of the country in one of the subsidiary companies.

By the time she tracked him down about 3 years later Jacob had gotten married and had 1 child and one on the way. Olivia never did get married and her FemDom beliefs were eventually lambasted by every reputable Psychologist and Sociologist as so much claptrap.

Stupid premise, happy ending

He was a complete empty head to put up with her shit for sooo long, and for what, sex, really?????

Better plots please, not ones that defy reality even in your universe. I like your stories but definitely not this one

Rates 3/5

I am firmly in line with the comment of ' lee5456' and agree with the sentiments expressed by 'ThegreyWolf81'Female domination is a myth and a serious fallacy when applied to marriage. While most husbands including myself will defer to their wives preferences and wishes when they cause no abuse and/or disrespect the events described in the foregoing tale will ALWAYS cause a relationships' destruction and in worst cases violence up to the point of murder of the disgusting woman. I assessed this story at1* which I consider excessively generous.

We read these LW's tales of woe for entertainment. I read them to see how far out they will go. And this one is not disappointing.

That there has absolutely ZERO to do with real and genuine BDSM and Female Domination, ladies and gents. What that there is an expression of is nothing more than old fashion cruel and insidious abuse-made-acceptable under a pretext of of feminism. Any real feminist -- not the sort of thing you see in society today with woke and whatever not -- will tell you that feminism and female domination is about building a relationship TOGETHER that is Female Led. Like any sane man wouldn't hit a lady, no sane woman, regardless of being feminist or not, would ever dare to go beyond the boundaries of her marriage. And those who does, they play a dangerous game; one I personally pray will bite them hard in the ass.

Good story, otherwise.

Really sick shit

I don't know any man that would sit still for that crap

made a change from all the gung ho revenge fantasies written by virgins.

snowbunny can bring up her bastard on her own and loses a good gentle man who just moves on and lives well.

The U.S. doesn't have "Charted Accountants" We have "Certified Public Accountants", commonly shortened to "C.P.A". Also, most universities have professors (full professor); assistant professors, associate professors, and adjunct professors.

If you set the story in the United States, try to use American English, not British.

Stopped reading right there! Didn't want to fight through pages of cars having "boots"; using a "spanner" , not a wrench to tighten a nut; and "arranging to" instead of organizing.

Not rated.

It's fair to say that you obviously find the FLR trope an all-consuming plotline that you repeat in almost all of your submissions thus far. After reading several of your published tales along this theme, I am at a loss in determining what your overall position is as the writer/creator; are you unconsciously advocating support for FLR, based on the number of similar tales, or do you support the victimised husband characters who appear to have misplaced their testicles? From reading your tales, your position on this seems vague and blurred. It is hard to feel any concern as a reader for either husband and wife as they are portrayed using wooden stereotypes. I suspect that is why many of the commentators find both wife and husband extremely hard to sympathize with.

Called Loving FLR, this relationship structure was created by a woman named Te-Erika Patterson. She promotes this structure which is almost identical to the one laid out in your story. The couple agrees that only her desires are important and both are devoted to fulfilling them. The man truly agrees to be her slave and servant though it is not pitched that way.

She has final say in everything. From small stuff such as what movie they will watch or where to eat dinner. To bigger things such as where they will live, whether they will have children, who works outside the home, etc. Generally he is responsible to do all chores of the house that must meet her standards (she is encouraged to set standards and enforce them rigidly). Why? To help her husband meet his potential! (I kid you not - that is a reason given). His failure to meet her standards can result in beatings of various types, severity and frequency with whips, etc. It all depends solely on her desires - he has no say or right to resist unless he is ready to divorce her. Finally is the greatest indignity: She has the right to cuckold him and screw anyone she wants but of course he has no such right. Basically all the restrictions for him and benefits for her that you named in this story are allowed and even encouraged in a LFLR.

Scarily, Patterson wants to expand her structure into a Female Led Society in which all men in America (and she hopes the world) are reduced to servants of all women and of course will have less rights by law. Hopefully unrealistic but a threat not to be ignored either. She has websites for both that you can check out. This structure really should drop the Loving because there is nothing loving about making your mate a slave. Also should be called Female Ruled Relationships since that is what it is.

Anyway just wanted to let all know that this story deserves 5+stars because it was not only well written but exposes a very threatening movement in American society.

Are there really men out there who are as stupid as the guy in this story?! Long before the cunt forced him to sign that ridiculous tendon marriage contract,it had to damn obvious what a manipulating,selfish, controlling pos she was. This story was a real puked! 🤮

Your information is anecdotal.

Here is a link to some actual statistics from the Census showing true info about parenthood. https://www.afro.com/census-bureau-higher-percentage-black-children-live-single-mothers/

I have been around African American males now for 32 years. In all that time I have only seen one who did not take care of his baby. Mind you I have seen and been around about 400 such people. So this Black baby father don't take care is well a myth. By the way, I am a white male. I really do wish authors here would be more factual.

Just web search "PIV rape"

This isn't just a story, it's a warning too.

Feminist bullshit, but ended well. Typical racial stereotype. White whore has baby with black adonis. He's gone, she is single baby mama and wants white wimp to take care of her and her baby bastard. He says no way and she is shopping at Wal-Mart.

Your comment at the beginning where you said you wondered if people could do this or even if a relationship would last is I'm afraid, sadly, something that some women believe in and want and also that some men think they would like though I agree that in the mens cases it's probably fantasy talking. There are women who would do this and this story, though fiction, is a good example of how, I think most men would respond. I quite liked it bud and I feel you described how most men would respond if you push them too far and it also wasn't too vengeful in response so well done.

These prejudiced clowns on Literotica spread their stereotypes like a plague, a Black man has a child, but in this author's mind "they" don't want to have anything to do with the child that they have fathered. Don't know where this moron gets his "alternative facts". Pathetic!!

A more intricate femdom relationship! I’ve been looking in vain for a story like this. It seems like they all have the wife (Domme) grow ever more cruel to her hubby, piling on greater and greater humiliations - and he moans and grits his teeth and complies right on! The wife becomes power-mad, losing the ‘loving’, forgetting to respect him. She converts her husband into a slave, and that’s supposed to invigorate the marriage? Where’s the thoughtful discussions of weighty matters? Where’s the light-hearted repartee and the inside jokes? She makes him fear her. Yet he just takes the abuse. Now, finally a story where the husband has had enough! And too much! ...I’d like a story in which the wife really does love husband dearly and comes to realize she’s gone too far just as he finds he can’t take it any more. Can the marriage be saved? If so, how will it be changed?

I wish the author hadn’t give away the ending at the beginning of the story.

Thanks for this one - thought provoking and enjoyable. J.

But if my wife cheats and has another man's child, that child is merely someone else's child. I read in the papers where a child died from disease, or fell to his death, or died in a.carwreck or house fire, or a thousand other causes. And that is sad. But then I turn to the Sports section and don't give it another thought unless someone brings it up. Then I might say, "Yeah, I think I read that. That's too bad." But I will not be made to feel bad about a child whose father who went on down the road when they found out that they had produced a child. The mother chose her lifestyle. Now, cope with it alone.

Lesson learned to late

Why do you keep writing the same story over and over again with small changes. It even looks like you cut and paste and modify slightly the same details. It would be better to give the characters different names and locations, unless it is in a series. Also most of you stories are to be continued, well finish them.

but the pseudo BDSM portion of that marriage is the deal breaker despite her goal for future prizes and awards, TK U MLJ LV NV

I can't believe that poor guy was so fucked up he'd actually agree to her sick Femdom contract! It was great he found his balls in the end and kicked the deluded slut to the kerb. Now she gets to be a single mother to her unwanted bastard child; yeah, that kid is really going to end up a well-adjusted member of society...

I'm not sure a second chapter is necessary. If you do write one, I hope the husband meets a woman who actually loves him and is excited to give him the children he deserves. Andrea needs to stay miserable and alone, cursing feminism for ruining her life, as she finally recognises it for the poisonous man-hating ideology that it is.

I gave you 5 stars because this story is so crazy. Low ratings many times are people outraged over the character's behaviors. Your writing is good and enjoyablet to read, so keep posting .

Done. Nothing to add. That chick was delusional.

No sequel necessary. I’m not interested in knowing or caring about what happens to either character.

The author may choose to write about fringe personalities but it seems a waste of talent and garners little reader interest or acceptance.

To anonymous. Actually there are unfortunately radical feminist who do actually believe in female supremacy and that men should be controlled. They are rare and few and are often called out by their colleagues

There are many aspects of life with which I am not familiar and I hope the type of extreme feminism described in this tale isn’t a reality. Some of the statement about females achieving higher positions in the business world and having greater numbers in other professions is accurate and yes, most of the women in those positions deserve them. Not being held back by old standards is better for both sexes. However when social pressure promotes a female over a better qualified male that is a failure.

Lover1953 the story was strange enough to encourage me to read it in its entirety even after my initial feeling of disdain toward Robert; a character you created with little redeeming worth. Any male or female who would agree to and sign the contract Andrea presented to Robert would be totally spineless. The fact that he signed and followed that contract does not create a sense of caring for his situation and just because he finally pulled his head out of his ass after the birth of Andrea’s child still left this reader with little respect for him. That being said, I will be reading your other submissions for other interesting views on life as you describe it in your worlds.

Hmmm, she changed her attitude, admitted she was wrong, was very contrite and wanted to try again. He got his divorce and kept his ego and pride intact. She said she still loved him, he was still angry at what she had done, plus she had the black child that would forever be a reminder, plus the husband could come back any time and want to be involved and if so would she cheat again. Is there a resolution to get them back together without he being looked on as a wimp? Probably, but she would have to sign a severe post nuptial agreement, he would have to get over the black child but he has a solid eight inches so should have no trouble keeping her happy once she agreed to all his sexual demands agreement to have a bunch of more of his children and rebuked all the feminist crap in the post nuptial. Would that happen, maybe but most on this site would argue against it, but it might make an interesting second chapter. 🖖

Belabored misogyny and silliness much! Add "fictional" at the front if you must

I just dread when LW writers take it upon themselves to expound on anything remotely "feminist." Just don't do it! It never works out.

In the end its a cuck story delivered dry as toast. The"cuck" part doesn't bother me per re. The toast part does.

At least he has balls . Dumb to live the way he did and when he signed the ridiculous contract she gave him there was a line about her being allowed to fuck others . Firstly I’d never even try that lifestyle no matter how much I loved her. As soon as the little black baby popped out I’d of left her that instant

I mean don't get me wrong it is okay written but I think you should have moved it to other websites maybe Wattlpad.

This is getting SO old! Of course it's fiction! But good fiction (not saying that this qualifies!), draws you into it's world and makes you care about its denizens.

If we don't care, then what's the point of reading it?

He was a bit out of alignment when he met the girl. For her it seemed like a perfect opportunity. Like many people she just kept expanding her bubble until it burst.

OK, so, I'm not sure what I just read. I know that there were several times during the first page and a half where I thought I should stop reading, but continued on because your synopsis said the husband had enough and I REALLY wanted to see what broke the trance he was in. That being said, you obviously found a subject you wanted to make a statement on and did so, so I'm not going to rock that boat. As you said, it's fiction.

That said, structurally, there is something I noticed that caused the read to be difficult to get through. There are a few instances where you would put a rather large amount of exposition in the middle of a conversation. Conversations are meant to flow, and when you stop to explain something, it drastically slows down the story. It's one thing to take a quick break during a conversation to talk about what is happening or what a character is thinking.

Using a specific example, in your last scene (to keep it brief, let's just start once they enter the conference room):

- Robert Speaks

- Explanation of how Andrea feels, followed by her Speaking

- Robert goes into a rant

- Explanation of Robert's actions, description of actions Robert is taking

- Robert's thoughts about what she said 3 paragraphs ago, thinks about the situation

- Robert Speaks

- Andrea Responds

- Robert Speaks

- Andrea Responds

- Exposition about Andrea's child, things that happened months ago

- Robert Speaks

- Description of Robert's actions & Andrea's response

To me, looking at that order, the scene is very clunky & I would have trimmed it down. It started out ok, and to me, the conversation wasn't a huge problem - there could have been more, Andrea probably should have fought a bit harder after she flew all the way to see Robert, she actually had very little to say, and if I think about someone that went that far out of their way, I think there'd be a bit more fight in her. Robert was fine, he got the short straw in their relationship, got out, and made sure she knew how he felt about the whole thing. I would, however, have cut down on the two paragraphs after his rant, I think we knew how he felt and the second half of that paragraph and the next (about her crying) could have been tightened up a bit and combined with his action with passing her the kleenex box. That damn paragraph about her child, though? That shouldn't have been in this discussion at all. If you believe the information was important for the story that you were telling, it should have been elsewhere (probably at the beginning of the Two Months Later section where you describe her journey to San Jose). It had no bearing on the conversation at the time, and, to me, did nothing but kill the momentum of the conversation which basically ended with Robert's next lines.

And the biggest problem is that this is the scene you end your story on. I had a teacher once tell met that when you're writing, you want a good hook to catch your reader's attention early on, but by far your best work should be at the end of the essay/story/movie/whatever. A good ending can overcome a lot of bland writing because it's the last thing that's in your reader's minds when they leave your work. I don't know if you watch movies, but something like The Sixth Sense is a perfect example of this. It's hailed as a bit of a classic, but all everyone remembers is the end of the movie and all the clues they missed. There's a ton of movie in the middle that everyone forgets about because, while they tell a story, it's the last few minutes of the movie that hit you smack dab in the middle of the face. That's what you remember.

And with your story, to be honest, the subject is something that I have NO INTEREST IN WHATSOEVER, but, because of a hook you promised at the beginning (and it wasn't a 10 page epic, don't think I could last that long on this subject - my opinion), it kept me reading to find out what happens.

That's a good thing. To take a subject that someone has no interest in and to keep them reading, that takes some skill. Very few people want to hate what they read, it's not human nature. And I certainly didn't hate what I read. I had issues with pieces of it, but you told a story.

And with saying that, I should also complement you. You took a subject you wanted to explore, put a fair bit of time thinking about a story and it's characters, wrote it out and did some polishing to it, and posted it - for FREE - to a website for others to read. So with that said, please don't take what I'm writing here as anything other than constructive criticism. I have no ill will towards your work here, if you want to take some of what I've said and apply it to your writing, then I'm glad I posted this comment. If not, I appreciate you listening and hope you continue to grow in your own way.

Cheers!

So Robert’s Rebellion was not that big a deal. That is what a normal, hetero male does. In fact, he never signs that premarital agreement nor does he endure a paddling or unreasonable rationing of sex. Just not how we roll.

I can see why you all don't like it, but to be clear, the author clearly not only rejected the beliefs behind the wife's mentality, he also pointed out such exploitive behavior is WRONG and goes against fundamental tenets of healthy human relationships.

While not common, it is not at all unheard of either, for male and even more so female subs, to be abused by so called Dom(mes) who are just crappy, creepy, selfish people with no regard for the emotional or physical health of their slaves.

As bad as this wife is, and she is the archetype of an evil bitch, we have plenty of villainous wives in the category who did much worse (frame their husband, pass off others kids as his, alienate his kids from him, try to kill him, etc)

Having said all that , it would have slipped through easier in some other category.

This story was extreme but believable. In my 60+ years I have seen marriages where one spouse continually mistreated the other. I have also seen copies of "contracts" like that one. They have of course been unenforcible but people have lived bu them as if they were.

I was pleased to finally see a male character who wasn't a blithering idiot and who had some self respect. I sincerely hope he doesn't end up back with her. How could he trust her? Let him make a new life and she finds a new man. Maybe her two men can have a conference before the new guy marries her.

Also, you completely missed making the real dad pay child support. Do you suppose that educated feminists would allow him to escape his responsibilities? Let's not ratify the idea that black men don't pay child support. We know he moved East to his new job. And what about his parents? Do you suppose they'd like to know about their grandson?

So many holes to fill.........

R.