by ArtyGee
Things are going too easy for Danny! There could be a storyline where Nancy starts believing the things she experienced under hypnosis (like sex with her professor in chapter 3) are actually real memories and neither she nor Danny knows what is real and what is suggestion any more.
Sorry, I meant chapter 2. I really felt like that was a point where the hypnotic suggestions and the real life experiences could get totally mixed up. That could make for a great story.
I mean that as a compliment. Were you to write more episodes, It might be interesting if the two main characters could 1) solidify a long term relationship and 2) sparingly use the mind control as a tool for erotic role playing from time to time. I'm not sure how you could regulate it to keep it from becoming little more than an aphrodisiac. I suppose the one sided nature of mind control prevents the subject from participating in interactive ad-libbing, which is sexy by itself.
Nancy and Danny...Dennis and Janey...Gunny...Cindy...Wendy... Professor Evans. The young guy mowing the lawn. Danny reminds me of a neighbor I came to know during the recent Coronavirus quarantine. I had a hot professor like Professor Evans. You have many characters that are believable. I have often wondered how people got into hypnotism. I wonder why some people can be hypnotized, but some people cannot. And I have wondered if people can fake being hypnotized. What would they be willing to do to make others think they have been hypnotized?