All Comments on 'I Deserved a Happy Ending'

Part of the dramatic stab to the antagonists hearts is the protagonist getting to vent their spleen and reveal the dark deeds of his enemies. The grand reveal, the in your face, you thought you got away with it but I was on to you. In this case had the adulterous duo lived, but certainly mortally injured, Richards could have confronted his wife first, and asking for the pain medication to be stopped so she could converse with a clear head. Then he could tell her what he knew and just how glad bad things happened to bad people. Next he could visit his brother and repeat the conversation, but with his sister in law in the room too. After all she had a right to know. More pain for the cheats. -- 4☆

Piss poor story!!!

Pore ol' truckdrivers get blamed for deaths in so many LW stories it has become a death by convenience.

Great story. Loved it. 5stars

Poorly written piece of crap

Not a satisfying story at all.

Short and right on the money.

I wonder how the kids and the rest of the family would have viewed the memories of the dear departed if he shared some evidence of what they were up to. Karama is great, but he should also have killed their credibility. Part II perhaps ;)

Thank you for writing, it was fun.

Great story. Justice served. No sequel needed.

Ed

Lucky that the MC didn't need to do anything.

But it was also kinda hollow inside not to confront the brother.

But thanks for the story Mr. JimmythePlunger

Lucky break for him, but they basically got off Scott free for the affair and disrespect.

Meh. If there is no regret or suffering from the cheater, it usually leaves me feeling unfulfilled.

Cheap.

3 stars

It's a pity that they died feeling superior to him, enjoying their secret game and the joyful humiliation of an ignorant fool. And they also did not feel the collapse and bitterness of the collapse of both families, as well as the complete alienation and ignoring of both of them by relatives and friends. It is necessary to destroy the good memory of them and stain their respectable images by voicing their dirty correspondence at a meeting of relatives. Revenge on them after death should be crushing for everyone! He needs to renounce all people who are somehow connected with these two. To completely end relations with everyone: with the daughter-in-law, Irene - because she was married to his shitty brother, with his children, nephews - because they were conceived with the sperm of his shitty brother, with the parents of a shitty wife - because they gave birth to her, with their parents - because they gave birth to a shitty brother too, with their children - because a shitty wife gave birth to them. Let everyone suffer and curse the adulterers for their betrayal!

$500,000 plus what you can sue the trucking company for...

As bad as it gets really, and will probably only be matched by plenty of equally mindless comments.

loved it kep up the great endings. if only every cheater got the same

No blood on his hands!

4

I sort of liked this story except that the cheaters died. My feeling is that them being exposed to family and friends would be more appropriate. Think of the shame and repercussions that they would suffer. What about their children? Little mention of them. Instead of them grieving for their mother, they would disown her. The cheaters being killed off without them having felt or expressing any guilt or shame, I think, weakens the story. However, keep writing. 👍

This story was given previously in loving wives.

See! Proves there is a God!

Kind of short

GREAT ONE. love how he gets rewarded for all his heartache

Ohh, how erotic! Another narcissist trying to become a writer. See, that's why literary porn lovers are shying away from this site. There's just too many macho chauvinist submitting stories and comments that tends to eliminate true erotic materials. How can this kind of story give you a boner?

Yes!!!!! Finally the pieces of shit get theirs.

At least give us a funeral service where he can expose the cheaters to all their family and friends before dumping his wife's ashes in a campground outhouse.

So this plonker had known of the affair for NINE months! Plus, had done nothing to stop it. He even knew it had been going on for multiple years. So, being too stupid to think of anyway he could kill them without getting caught, but was resolved to kill them anyway, just before their 25th anniversary.

When he finds out from the Police, this dumbo immediately bursts out laughing, then tells them they were having an affair. Immediately making him a possible suspect in their deaths. Did he pay the truck driver to crash into them? But an error was made and he killed them instead. Police investigation. What a moron.

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The BTB crowd are real pieces of work. They rejoice when characters in stories are killed or have strokes or are maimed in a variety of ways. Getting an erotic kick out of violence is a true sign of sickness.

Here I was, hoping against hope that a new author was going to try to be clever, and not just a cookie-cutter man-child BTB incel.

Silly me.

Just….well….boring. Unoriginal … like most stories here … but completely drab and … BORING.

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2 **

To put up with that shit for 9 months is just too unbelievable to me. 3 stars.

I liked it. But I would have liked to know what the sister in law and the rest of the family thought about them being together on a Friday night.

The only thing missing was making sure sister in law, family and friends know what a cheating whore, she and his brother were.

Needed the usual his bitten off cock stuck in her throat!

Does he tell the sister in law? Are the kids his? Who does the truck driver work for and are there insurance from them as well.

Nine months, that's an awful long time to live in that kinda shit. That stretches the credibility of it all.

Men plan, and God laughs

Shades of hooked 1957 story karma train, but still a good story

What started as a BTB story ended on a very different note but one that benefitted the CUCK. Great story

1 star - violence in the LW category always gets a one star rating.

Even if it was the kind of karma both the SLUT and the ASSHOLE deserved.

Is there any international service like that to hire including insurances? It certainly would help the courts to be free for other matters and accelerate the successful end of marriages. Cosmically, its should be called KARMA FOR HIRE or KFH.

I do like a happy ending!

MC's reaction is not believable. The shock and surprise, alone, would've rendered him stunned or at least speechless. Unless he's a sociopath, he'd probably just thanked the officers and maintained the appropriate demeanor until the fuzz buzzed, and then he could indulge in his grand promenade. All things considered, pretty decent. 3/5.

That was a bit different. Not bad, but different.

That was probably a reasonable stopping point, but it feels incomplete. Sure, they are dead, but what about their reputations? Did his parents know and need to be burnt next? Does his sister-in-law get comforting from him in her time of loss or does he tell her the sordid tale and they just revenge fuck postmortem? All these questions left unanswered...

Meh. Pretty weak.

Did you try any other category, or just the one most likely to give your 4.5 inch cock conniptions, cv31770? Methinks it’s not the lack of eroticism that’s really pissed you off, that would be incredibly stupid of you if that’s the case

This is a rehash of "Kate's Date" by Saddletramp. Although he wasn't quite as angry when he wrote it.

I enjoyed the read and laughed along with the MC at the end. Need more depth for me to give it a top score. 4*

Kenworth to the rescue! A semi-decent ending. D

average

Inane. Cuck lucks out. just cuck fantasy bullshit.

Would have been better if only the brother died

and the wife survived but maimed.

Then he would have had the satisfaction of divorcing her after she

expected him to care for her.

What a happy ending. And for the two cheating Karama and her name is crashing death.

Not remotely interesting.

Mr. Plunger, it is always nice to see a belittled protagonist win with little or no cost to themselves. Sure he put up with 9 months of hell, better than the eternity they will have. He walks away with the money, he doesn't face jail and he can start over sooner Yes, a win, win, win.

Boring

Only average. Story was too short. What about the phone messages? Isn't WhatsApp supposed to be more secure? I'm not a WhatsApp user but I know there are some chat app's that are supposed to be secure, and the messages are automatically deleted after they are read. If they are still in the phone, he still could use them to destroy their reputations and expose them for the cheaters, they were. That was a big oversight on their part. It didn't really cover all the possibilities that could have been covered to improve the story. Did his sister-in-law have any questions as to why they were in the car together, where were they going and why wasn't he with them, that should have sent up red flares and put question in everyone's mind. Most of the better writers will answer in their stories, the who, the what, the when, the were, and the why, the story reached the culmination and ending that it does. Just a few ideas that may improve your scores on your stories. Know where your story is going with an outline and a desired destination for the ending. Ask yourself if it is plan to everyone the answers to those four W's. Thanks for putting forth the effort on your story and good luck in the future.

Karma Train

Simplistic and piss poor. Two stars.

using solar energy for most of the heating & electrical needs, so unlikely.

This is a fantasy hotel right?

Why hide it

Celebrate

Why didn't tell sister-in-law and have her input when discovered the cheating?!

So average

That’s more like it Jim! Good story about a much deserved ending.

Lol....****

here somehow the climax is missing ... no drama, no "disclosure", no exposure in front of the family ect. would the rest of the family have known about it ? Friends and colleagues ?

Here would have been, as usual in such settings, much more story and "Experience" in it. Wasted potential

screw the naysayers. they aren't writing and offer nothing but criticism. Really serious consequences but i still LOVED the ending.

A story of a piss of guy from a cheating wife winning the lottery as both cheaters died in a car accident. He gets rich with a truck settlement too. Why kill for two cheaters. They stole your love but not anything else .divorce and move on. The human race mostly males kill. Nothing has changes since some wise men made Jesus our so called savoir . we still kill threw wars,,religious Indoctrination,personal hate,its amazing how easy it is to manipulate people into their belief s, hate runs strong.

I agree with feltffixer would have been better she survived but not divorced her as that would seem mean but maybe she couldn't have sex every again and she got to stay at home while he went and fucked his sister in law instead

I agree with muskyboy.

Pathetic story - death and murder are a cowards and sociopaths solution to any problem in life

Story should continue so he could expose them and their deeds so their reputation is destroyed.

Anony wrote, "It is necessary to destroy the good memory of them and stain their respectable images by voicing their dirty correspondence at a meeting of relatives. Revenge on them after death should be crushing for everyone! He needs to renounce all people who are somehow connected with these two. To completely end relations with everyone: with the daughter-in-law, Irene - because she was married to his shitty brother, with his children, nephews - because they were conceived with the sperm of his shitty brother, with the parents of a shitty wife - because they gave birth to her, with their parents - because they gave birth to a shitty brother too, with their children - because a shitty wife gave birth to them. Let everyone suffer and curse the adulterers for their betrayal!"

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Bitter much?

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This accomplishes what, exactly? All this will do is lower the respect everyone else has for the MC; most people avoid speaking ill of the dead.

Cheap way to write a story! A lot of filler, waiting to see how Hubby was going to get around (still controlling the action AND getting the pleasure of seeing them know they were toast but Hubby would not be dinged at all!). Nope, just a fucking auto accident!

2*

Mr Spencer wrote, "So this plonker had known of the affair for NINE months! Plus, had done nothing to stop it. He even knew it had been going on for multiple years. So, being too stupid to think of anyway he could kill them without getting caught, but was resolved to kill them anyway, just before their 25th anniversary."

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Yeah, kind of wimpy.

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IF he really wanted to kill them both, and wanted to avoid prison was was willing to face it anyway if it got him his revenge, it wouldn't be that hard to do! Take cash, and buy a used car on the black market, then forge a temporary tag. Get what cash you can, have your stuff packed in the car and ready to go. Shoot them, and then take off, for the Appalachian hills, where a fellow can easily get lost. Or, if you want, head for Canada or Mexico, just arrange things so you are ready to go before the bodies are discovered and have a good enough lead.

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Have extra temporary tags, or stolen license plates, which you can change frequently. Pay for food and gas in cash. Ditch your cell phone.

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There are a million places to get lost in rural America, or in Mexico, or in Canada. No one is going to question you in New Brunswick or Saskatchewan. You can always work for cash in Kentucky or West Virginia. You can trade out the clunker car in which you fled for another well-used pick-up truck. Faked IDs can be had.

Premise was fine. Story itself could use a bit more polish. Can't say I liked the whole 'hope the justice system doesn't screw me over' idea. After months of thinking about it, he should have come up with something better. I would have been better if he had a better plan and had it ready to go, but then she dies before he can set it off. A solid 4.25*

Hey Reed, you’ve been quiet too long. Write the story you’ve just outlined. It sounds interesting. This one was good too, and it really got the cuck fans crying , and that’s always fun.

Disappointing is really the only word that comes to mind for me.

There just wasn't anything there after the buildup because the buildup was all for naught.

And the whole thinking-of-a-way-to-murder-them thing that goes on for months while they just carry on fucking just isn't a believable time frame.

Karma, a good short story with an happy ending, it did what it said on the tin 5*

Where is the beef?

Sad story at best. AAA+

A cuck with unfulfilled aspirations to become a man.

Not much here to even think about. The wimp sat on his ass for 9 months debating? Then there is a convenient tired trucker who runs a red light! How often has this throw away excuse for a plot been used? TOO OFTEN! No story, no character worth investing in, no excitement, no sex, nothing. The only thing our author forgot to mention was that she was giving him a blow job at the time of the accident and bit his cock off. Then he would have employed all the usual mandatory mindless expressions!

Would have been better if he sued the trucking company for the tragic loss of his beloved

Loved it!!

Why isn’t this rated higher?!? It’s a beautiful story, and provides hope for karmic justice!

ZK

Not a fan of death for cheaters. They should have had a long life of suffering!

Though he could not say good-by before they took that last breath, he damn sure could of pissed on their graves!!

As the author says, "How very fucking sad." 5 stars

I was gonna write the same as ZK. Almost perfect story. The only thing better would be if he could have confronted them. But this way his hands are clean.

I very much enjoyed this! I’ve enjoyed most of your works! Please continue!

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Be well!

Don't you love when problems solve themselves?

Sometimes procrastination is the key!

Oh I loved this, short , sharp and right to the point.

Great read, so many men and probably women dream of this way out of their own marriage problems.

Is there any way to give higher than the 5 star rating?

This piece certainly deserves it.

From a previous comment: he damn sure could of pissed on their graves!!

Might be a bit difficult as according to the story the husband was going to have her cremated.

Though, he could urinate in the urn; defecate also.

he damn sure could of pissed on their graves!!

one of Jimmys best stories. I give it a “5”.

How delightful to find a truly unrepentant character in what too often turns into a “Forgive and Forget” story!

Another confirmation that in story world there really is a God!

MCs a pussy and got lucky, steel toed boots are meant for destroying testicles w/ a good heel stomping after a half dozen, kicks, then for driving a cunts broken pubic bones deep inside her pelvis followed by kicks to hips and asshole. Then a celebratory drink as you get your breath back. 3*s for a weak mc. rk

That Lady Dog Karma turned the tables?

Wow, I needed her years ago! Anyone got a number please?

Damn! Was not expecting that as an ending. Brilliant!

9 months of that shit really

Sweet

Dude did deserve an HEA, and I am glad he did not kill them.

Good quickie fiction

SWEEEEEEEEET I am LOVING Karma