by FifthEstate
Awesome story! Looking forward to many swallowing scenes and hopefully no interaction from her husband s side besides watching and being envious.
I found it in unoriginal, you are watering down things you’ve already written, seems you are all over the place with this one, Brock and the boys could have took care of the secret slut instead of some dirt in his finger nails handy man in his fifties. In the past I’ve read every word of your buildups, but this really didn’t turn me on. I’m not trying to be critical just honest,
5 stars! I'm looking forward to the next chapter. I hope this story ties into the bull pen. I'd love to revisit that place in the future with the characters from this story.
I am thoroughly enjoying the story too and look forward to the next part. I need to reread it, but I hoping in the current week (or so) to send you some more in-depth feedback privately via email.
I can’t wait for Allie to get the bbc load on her face in her mouth, clean it all up and eat it, something she refuses to do for her husband, but if the black cock wants it, she’ll do it! Can’t wait
This story reads like an erotic trainwreck that you just know is going to happen. We can all assume that Allie will end up taking Robert as a lover, but before she does this, her husband is going to watch her slip further into her fantasy. The story evokes an almost queasy feeling while reading because we know things will be changing, radically changing for Allie and Jack. I wonder if Jack will be as excited after he sees his wife with Robert, or Brock, or maybe both. What a slippery slope for Jack to be playing on.
I loved the line(the foreshadowing) when Allie told Jack, DONT EVEN THINK OF GETTING ANY OF YOUR CUM ANYWHERE NEAR
MY FACE OR MY MOUTH. Well, I’m sure when the time for the beautiful black monster cock cums, Allie will be more than happy to slurp, lap, milk and eat it all up. I’m hard thinking about it, the sooner the better
You should write what works for you, but I find this storyline too close to your other stories. Another closet slut wife that falls for BBC. You are a great writer and you know how to build up a story, but I hope you pick a different theme next time. Try to mix things up.
This story is really, really arousing
I‘m sure after Robert has blacked her it will not be long that Brock and his friends will fuck her as well
I‘m waiting for chapter 3
I hope the white couple,get more than they bargained for. Allie doesn’t want to nor has the will to say no to a black cock once in the situation, but Robert doesn’t turn out to be a trustworthy, respectful of white wives kinda guy. Allie wanted a black man to show dominance over her, but she didn’t expect to get face fucked while fed a huge load of cum on an empty stomach. After she confesses want happen to Hannah, her plotting friend gives Brock the information and they conspire to turn Allie into prey. He nails her sweet unprotected pussy,and takes her anal virginity. Jack catches it all on film and is helpless with his dick in his hand
The rougher the better, please. Watch what you wish for Allie? You can control a dildo but not an aggressive predator black dude with no regard for you but your three holes
Excellent story. Looking forward to Chapter 3. ? for you..when are you going to do the Bull Pen series? Absolutely captivated by the Speedo Doesn’t Lie story line! Waiting for the follow up..
Five Stars!
I'd be curious to know if the husband has had a vasectomy or if the wife is on the pill.
Excellent story and I like how jack and Allie’s open communication is growing. For all those naysayers, people are guarded and things are held back, no matter how open and trusting of your partners judgement.
Just hope Mr Jackson doesn’t double cross Jack!
This type of situation is what I fantasize about happening to my wife. Her getting a taste and being slowly drawn into desiring and craving a big black cock. Love thinking about blackmen seeing the signs and seducing her into sucking their cocks. Love thinking about her turning into a blackcock sucker and seeing her sallowing the cum they feed her. Her trying to stop them from fucking her by sucking them but ending up being taken.
First, I think it be better if it just happened and she cheated opposed to it being set up with Jacks permission, I like the camera but I’d rather he was surprised to see it on film afterward? Second, as a couple other comments, I dont want the studs to be good guys who want to please her, I would much rather they be thugs who just wanna be little her while they use her mouth and body and of course her never used rose Bud
This is an excellent build-up to the consummation of Allie's introduction to BBC. It would be great if you included Hannah in on the action. Also, I hope you let Robert give Allie a thorough anal reaming as part of her being welcomed into the world of BBC. I know Jack would enjoy that immensely, given Allie's slowly eroding conservatism in the sack.
I like very much the story, is very erotic. I am waiting on the every new chapter.
This was one hot story. It had me thinking about my first wife getting blacked like all married white women should. Keep writing.
Great story! Can wait for the next chapter! Definitely want Allie to suck and fuck both Robert and Brock!
Allie is one of the hottest characters ever, but also kinda unlikeable, I hope she gets the big black dick but on the cocks terms, not hers
Brilliant as always, really longing for chapter 3. My cock is harder than his was watching Kirsten.
As always, great story. The plot and progression of the story is exciting and very beautifully presented.
I just think it's a shame that you don't continue to write your other great stories unless you didn't graduate from UCLA.
Great story. It is like waiting for a train wreck. We know she will get fucked by Robert and Brock . Their life has changed and they don know it.
I am loving the story so far! Can't wait to read part 3.
As for Robert Johnson.... I just hope this one never sold his soul to the Devil to get his 'Giant Cock' 🤣
I’ve Dm fifth on both chapter one and two and never got a response, yet I was notified of the story coming out. Maybe he will delete this like he did a couple of other comments lol
Fifthestate, please man, let Allie get it in the ass, un planned suprised ass fucking
5 star from me too. Your best work yet!
I also messaged you on here for both chapters with no reply but that's fine. Eagerly checking each day for an update on Ch 03
Thank you!
FifthEstate,
This story is insanely hot. My only gripe is that you said that this story is 3 chapters long. Does that mean everything will unravel in the next chapter? I love the current pacing and was hoping for continued edging and a slow burn cucking. I really hope you decide to take your time with story and perhaps extend it into another series or continued chapters.
This is the first story I've read of yours and I'm extremely impressed. (I really loved how taboo you made me feel when we were spying on the wife watching porn! that set up was hot)
I second that. The pacing so far has been on point! This is my favourite one from you
Your writing has always been amazing - dying for the next chapter!!! Write like the wind, please!
Incredibly hot story!! Can’t wait for the next chapter!
It’s a huge fantasy of mine to watch my wife take a one or more huge cocks! Including Big Black Cocks. I love how she enjoys being stretched and how wet it makes her….
Keep up the great writing!!!
I just had to comment again…. My cock is so hard and leaking after reading your story! I’d love to stumble across a secret huge toy my wife uses! I’d love to encourage her or even share with her a big thick sexy cock!!
So hot!!!
I can’t wait to see who the home renovations go specifically how Robert creates that open space that Allie and Jack are both secretly craving!!!
🔥😈🔥
Lucky white wife, gets to suck on the beautiful black pipe of Brock, let the stud feed her with his delicious jizz, fill her tummy,and tell her to give Jack a big kiss when he gets home so he can have a taste as well, you know he wants to know what it’s like too
Chapter 3 will upload to Lit on Thursday and should publish over the weekend. I’m obviously biased but I think it’s pretty good and I think you will too.
I agree with the other comment, Jack would love to share a cum kiss with Allie, no doubt about it, he’d be into licking her clean after the boys blow inside her as well
Definately ENTERTAINMENT ! You are off to a very good start. Just keep writing !
Jack is getting deeper and closer to being cuckolded and is loving the sexual tension and is longing for Allie to experience the pleasure of Robert’s BBC just as Hannah and Kirsten have experienced with Brook. Going to read chapter 3 straight away. Excellent story.
great story, very similar,
I'm looking forward to the sequel.
One more question, are you continuing your other two stories or are you merging them?
Absolutely love this brilliantly written and detailed can’t stop reading it
Normally 6 pages is a lot for me to read, being a slow reader, without the woman getting her BBC, but this one is the exception. Well written and erotic, I like the slow buildup from conservative wife to big cock craver. I was really hoping she would make out with the black dude at the party and at least get a feel of that 10 incher through his pants before she got sick. 5 stars and reading on
The build up of her lust for big black cock is so erotic. Anticipating her turning into a rampant slut for black cocks
Loved it when she considered if his cock was big enough for that cowboy position. Hubby must know shes had bigger to know that the length matters to keep him in her.
I enjoyed the hell out of it.y wife is into the bbc trip and told me about a fantasy she has been having.we are into roleplay and she loves it when I am dressed up in her sexy lingerie she said she would like to have a three-way with a bi black guy.. she calls me Kristi she wants Kristie to be a part of the three-way I said that I definitely want to be a part of it
It's a good story but I am going to make it happen for her to have her fantasies full filed and I get some new stuff for me.. she is going to go get everything we need and she decided that we should be wearing matching lingerie so it is RED LACE AND SATIN LINGERIE FOR US