by VenusButterflies
It really is an exciting follow up to the first part. Very very juicy.
Mary
Well, that was a nifty way to side-step the whole "How do I tell my wife I'm fucking our daughter" issue. I certainly didn't see it coming.
That said, the story is lacking something. Maybe it's lacking passion or intrigue or character growth/development... I dunno, but something is lacking. The characters have a sort of cardboard-ish quality about them and I can't really find myself identifying with any aspect of them, no connection.
Technically, it was written with passing marks, but the story itself lacked substance. But I guess that it was what it was meant to be: a stroke piece. And if that's all you were going for, then you've accomplished your goal. I feel, however, that you might've been able to make something more of this. I'm not at all a fan of the S&M undertones, so maybe that's where the disconnect is for me. Or maybe it felt rushed. Again, I don't know... but I hope your future work improves with time and experience!
Not a fan of the second half... don't care for mum at all. I think this would have been ok as a one chapter piece. I would love to read more daddy/daughter from you with a slightly stronger daddy with no mummy coming in to take over.
This truly was a great story and I'd love for you to continue on with this series! The mom made things so much hotter and how she had no problem with him fucking her was amazing! Please write more of this series, ill be looking forward to it.
loved both chapters...very hot and well written.....want more from these three....love you thoughts and mind
Wonderfully depraved. I enjoyed the additions of both Jack and Mom. Your sex dialogue is exceptionally hot.
Love the story and how it progressed into mom joining them!
More please!!