by TheHound
but not enough "hot" stuff in this story. I gave it a "4" for the writing, but it really isn't all that erotic. Should have received a "2" for erotic content. IMO - had to wade through too much literature to get to the hot stuff!
Really dull, overlong in the preamble and then far too short when you get to the hot stuff.
I liked the buildup, but the sex was a bit too short. Extend it and it would be better. You have really good writing