All Comments on 'I'd be Better Off'

A powerful story that shows just how much of a cocksucking asshole Jake is. He not only takes Will's wife, but also his life. I've found 1 sequel, but it's rough. Amy comes out smellinh like a rose, not like the cheating slut that she is.

Jake is an asshole and Amy a whore. Hopefully his parents will disown him, and tell Amy to eat shit and die

Sad story, felt it was well written. The ending was gruesome for Will, but have to admire his commitment. Thanks for your writing.

Men, we pin our lives, dreams and hopes on the fickle thing called woman.

That was hard to read. So much pain.

Well written but Will was a pathetic character. Maybe that's why his wife fell for his brother so quickly. She might have sensed his flaw or actually seen it emerge some time before. His brother was an asshole and his wife a horrible bitch but the outcome was all on Will.

Wifey was just a hoe! If it wasn’t his brother, it would have been someone else. I suspect she picked the brother, because she also a Narcissist. A lot of hoes are. She fed off of hubbies emasculation and pain! Being that even hoe’s like to “ win the spin”, I expect she will eventually drop big brother, so she can get out from under the negative reactions from family and friends. She will probably move away, marry someone else. Have kids, and then hoe around on her new family. Dats what hoes do!

5 stars.

The ghost of George Jones smiles....

sad but an outstanding story.

That's a good read, you made MC a bit pathetic really, but it held together as a story well.

A little melodramatic, I think. Ending your own life over anyone, does not make any sense. Would have been better for Will to kill his brother, and disappear. I am sure he thought this would make a major statement, but all it did was allow them to get married, with no interference. 4 stars.

A sad but loving tale. It's hard to imagine a love so powerful that it would destroy you so completely that you can't live without it. The only thing worse than a betrayal of a spouse is the betrayal of a family member. Thanks for sharing the story. 5*

Reading again. This story really packs an emotional punch that not many authors can convey. Jacob and Amy deserve a sequel detailing the emotional hell that they live in.

So much for a Marine’s honor and fidelity. Would have been poetic justice if Amy discovered herself pregnant, forced to raise Will’s child.

Well, at least here there remains a sliver of hope that the cheaters will NOT live happily ever after...

Dark and sad. Pretty sure that the cheaters (at least emotional cheaters and saboteurs of Will's marriage) will NOT get together. Guilt will wreck eberything. The brother is an evil, evil man with no honor.

MC was fucking stupid and a coward. Personally, I would have killed both of them with out even blinking.

It seems like all of these stories are written to make you think all men are weak and can't live without their women. I'm here to tell you, THAT'S HORSESHIT!

In thearmed forces nothing is despised like a jodie

1 star. This is the stupidest, most idiotic thing to do possible. This destroyed ANY respect I had for MC. Suicide is cowardly, and suicide over divorce and lost "love" is dumber than almost anything any human can ever do. It's a good thing the mentally defective dude died, at least he won't pollute the gene pool. The fact that the fucktard hurt his parents and his friends just adds the shit cherry on the shit cake that is his morals or personality. I mean, women eat this shit up, I get it. Ooooh how rooooomantic, he loooooover the useless bitch so much he'd rather be dead than without the utterly replaceable cunt who LITERALLY had no redeeming qualities as a mate. Only a woman would consider that as a positive. A selfish disgusting woman with zero empathy.

Great story 5 stars. Didnt see any suicide, MC was mudered his brother did it in selfdefense but MC was still mudered. Wife and brother were evil, its a sad day when a good person dies.

A sad but really good stroy.

Thoroughly enjoyed this well developed story. Thanks and 5 stars from me.

Taking his brother's wife is almost a bad as killing him. May he live a long and miserable life, then die and burn in the hottest level of hell...Forever. May Amy be eaten alive by he grief, any join him, burning forever.

I'm surprised nobody picked up on the warning signs in his conversations. Very sad, it caught me off guard. Losing your wife to a brother; I can't even imagine what that would feel like. Hate suicide, it is such a waste. It is a 5 star story though, regardless of the subject matter.

So they fall in love, she gives him her virginity, they're married for a few years, then she meets his brother and instantly falls for him? Oh come on, no one is buying that shit. And the brother gets away with murdering to boot. Well at least they'll be haunted with his death. A small justice.

I've read this story several times and have added it to my Favorites, scoring it a 5/5. I have to say that it reminds be of a life lesson that learned almost 35 years ago. Let me share that lesson with all of you who may have come across my comment here. My good friend had been dating his girlfriend since they were in 7th grade. They were inseparable and did everything together - including giving their virginity to each other. After graduating from high school, they both decided to work for a year before going off to college together. Towards the end of that year, my friend asked his girlfriend to marry him, with the idea that they would remain engaged until graduation and then get married. To everyone's surprise, not only did she decline his offer of marriage, but told him that she was breaking up with him. My friend was devastated! He was inconsolable. A week later, his parents found him dead in their garage after he committed suicide. So? What exactly was the lesson that I learned, and how does it relate to this story? The lesson is this... "There's not a woman alive on this earth that's worth killing yourself over". They are replaceable. Losing a love will hurt. And replacing them will take time and effort. And it will be different that what you've ever had. It will even likely feel like you've wasted the years you've spent together. But it wasn't a waste. It was it's own episode in your life. Close it out, and begin a new episode. You may be asking, have you ever had to do that Billy Ray? The answer is no. I've been married 33 years and I love my wife with my whole heart. But I will tell you that my mind has always been prepared that if the time ever does come where it's over between us, I'll of course feel sad and hurt, but I also know that I'm mentally prepared to move onto that new episode of my life. And as horrible as the betrayal thrust upon the M/C in this story was, he should have closed the current episode, and eventually opened a new one. BRB

Hated it

5/5 Loved this. Made me cry. Great work, thanks for sharing!

It is ‘evocative’. This is the word I use when it strikes well emotionally, but the emotions are none I seek to wallow in. I can accept painful stories just fine but I strongly prefer a pay off. This did not have any of that.

The only solace here is knowing that a real life Amy would go insane with grief and guilt. The cheating, killer brother would die on his next mission.

Class A story! 5 stars.

I hate tragic stories. 5 stars.

What an amazing start to the series.

Semper fidelis.

Really good story!

That really was maudlin bullshit.

Really shitty ending and the sequal only makes it worse. I read a story where one of the M/C was abducted and tortured by Pirates. How about Jake, lost at sea, captured by pirates and has his bald doused by charcoal lighter and someone throws a match…..Just saying.

Five stars but "Love it," is hardly appropriate.

It only lasted 12 to 14 months in my case but grief made me permanently ill. Who we love, why we love them and how deeply we love them are all mysteries and whilst I'm no fan of ignorance, I think some answers we are better off not knowing.

2nd read and so so misty! What a tragic loss of such deep love!

We know the feeling and we feel the pain.

Maybe my 3rd read? Still one of my favorites oat.

This was fucking brilliant. The speed at which she was to kick him to the kerb was shocking. He did give all the warnings about what would happen but as usual no one ever takes people seriously until it is too late at which point it is either I had no idea or I should have listened but either way a man whose only major fault was that he loved his wife too much and too hard.I shall be going over this tale many times in my future and I am sure it will be just as bloody wonderful at the 50th reading that it was at the first.

The best story I have red on literotica. Very well writen, just the right length, no unneccesary baggage. A ten out of five stars. I dont usually look for something this hart wrenching. His love so strong, so right so promising. The anguish of betrayal. The country song fortelling the MC's revenge. The last will and testament then empty 1911 Colt auto, a gift from his brother. Will strarted the unstopable chain of events that gave him mercy he needed.

To the Author: I just finished 3 of your stories. the other two were not bad, but not 10 out of 5. I hope you have at least one more like this.

5 stars. But damn that is beyond dark and harsh. Wow. Have to rate it 5 stars but no way a rational, balanced person can "love it". Yikes.

Sorry. It is well written it just can’t believe any man is so weak and worthless that this is what he does. Your MC had no self respect or esteem. Getting killed over a person who no longer wants you is stupid and senseless.

I could rate this either as 0 stars or all 5, depending on the point you have read to. 5💥💥💥💥💥, which is not enough. I'm closer to the MC than any character in any story by any author. My first and deepest love left me, took our two sons and after a year got a divorce on abandonment. I was not reachable but not irreplaceable to the Army where they had me. Then came Grenada. I lost my leg there and was evaced to the states. I was told they had been informed, but they never came to see me. Shipped to Texas and discharged from the Army, the Rangers, and the VA hospital. For 12 hours I waited to be picked up, I finally stole the wheelchair and rolled into the street to try to get home. After getting home, the house I paid to have built was empty, just dust inside. I never saw them after that. Both sons went into the Army after 9/11. In 2013 I was informed my oldest died in a raid. In 2015 the other died, and like me, their lifes were seal away under national security. The bitch hit the back of a D10 Cat at 100 mph, they buried paste. With help from some friends her grave was filled the night before with piss and the scent sacks of 10 skunks. Life as I knew it ended in that chopper over Grenada, I just exist now.

Great writing, great story.

I'm not one for a huge amount of history - where they met, what they did, etc. - even tho I do want some. Once I got out of that area into the "story" itsself, I was drawn into the love, emotion, & tragedy that ultimately followed. While I don't think that anybody, presenting that situation, is worthy of my death, in the story, that's what happened. I can't see how a normal-thinking man would do that without, at least, getting some deeply needed medical intervention.

Re: WolfOfTheWorld: I feel your pain even tho I never went through what you did. I pray that you get relief (any way you think that without duplicating "little brother's" death). While I strongly disagree with what you wrote about the grave & it's contents, I also strongly understand.

Very well written & told (except, to me, for the start, as explained), but it still earns 5 stars. Bob

This is the third time I have read this and every time I cry uncontrollably. That depth of pain is something you don’t just feel but you attempt to either survive it or you don’t. You may think you have had this type of pain but unless it is all consuming to the point that you cannot escape it years and decades later, you have no clue. I think killing a family member that you deeply loved it a way to feel that depth of pain.

Wow…….just wow. 5 stars for an incredible ride. I could actually feel his hurt and pain.

A tour de force! I'll just go with with "consulting91" wrote. Only thing was Will killing himself at the end. No sane man would do that. Was thinking of downgrading my rating, but somehow it fit into the story, along with the strong writing. I could've done with less history, tho. However, any other rating than 5 stars on this would be unfortunate. Bob

Absolutely BRUTAL...

5 stars

Man dies for defective wife? I can't connect to it. In a Darwinian sense, she revealed the presen of unfit traits and this gave him the opportunity to move on to a partner of greater genetic fitness.