All Comments on 'If I Had You Ch. 02'

“…right feeling, wrong guy.” Hope that’s not the case for Jay since that seems to be what broke Jason. And Paul is (was?) a virgin? Oh boy.

I like the story a lot. But please make it a happy ending for jason an paul. It would be heartbreaking if they didn't get their happy ending

Awwww.. butterflies … I feel butterflies …. Good read …

Beautiful. Love these characters. Thank you!

The story just gets better and better! A little bit of mystery, and a 'past'. All add to the plot and suspense.

I can hardly wait for the third chapter..

DV19

No criticism only great praise for both parts can't wait! Would 4 parts in the next 2 days be too much to ask. That's how great you are can't wait, can't wait. Bobby

This is a great start. Can’t wait for it to continue and some of the intrigue is revealed. What/who broke Jason? Clearly is seems to be a former “straight” roommate. Why, when Jay was lusting so hard over Paul, is he pulling away now that Paul is interested. It’s seems like a huge leap of Jay’s to assume Paul is straight when he is open to flirting, kissing and a blowjob. Plus he’s very honest about his virginity and his desire to spend more time and get to know Jay. What’s the backstories with Ian, Jamie and Mason? Eager to read more!

Great story. Eagerly waiting for more.......

And another great chapter, I'm so happy! :) I'm glad you didn't rush to the anal sex part, especially if he is virgin it would be a bit weird. But you got me at this Jay-Jason thing. I tried to solve this, but you gave not that many clues.

I laughed like crazy at that sentence: "his balls whispering "why won't you let us cum?" "

Yep! I know the feeling all too well! My balls are sometimes very persistent in their whispers. :)

Ah! Another thing I forgot! Is Paul going to top Jay? Jay is smaller and he seems a bit... on a bottom side, if I can catch his energy right :) I topped this kind of nervous/traumatized guys in the past :D It would be a very rare and unique situation on Literotica if a virgin would top. You can't see that here often. Usually, it's another way around, and they lose their ass virginity. Or...... they're going to flip? :)

I particularly love stories that demonstrate that men have a more complex process building a relationship rather than the wham bang process more commonly portrayed in these stories. These characters have a personality and conflicts, providing interest for the reader. These guys feel real. I am looking forward to the coming chapters.

I like that story is slow pacing no jumping to anal right away.

Part 1 was a great way to introduce Jay and Paul! I love the way the friendship is starting to grow and the vulnerability they both have! Looking forward to part 3 as Paul seems to have jumped in to Jason’s circle of friends and be his boyfriend much to Jason’s chagrin! There’s so much more to the characters and yet everyone has Jay’sbest interest at heart!

Tbh I couldn’t finish reading the story. Jay was acting so desperate. He saw Paul once and immediately started fantasizing about him and jerked off in the bathroom like wtf 😬. I mean he just seemed very pathetic and desperate. It would be better if he waited at least two weeks to start acting the way he did. I mean he could find him attractive the first time he laid eyes on him but part one just put me off the story. Jay was so annoying, desperate and pathetic. Which is probably why he got hurt in college. I can’t imagine how much worse he would have been if he’s still so desperate now. Being immature and in college must have been a disaster. I know it’s just a story and I hope I’m not too harsh. Just an opinion. I like your writing style and the storyline but Jay needs to cool his head off. Both of them lol.

This is hot and very well done! Thanks

Anon 8 months ago,

What are you even talking about? If you think you sound smart, then no, you sound like someone that is born with no brain.

I have never heard of fantasizing on somebody as a "pathetic and desperate" thing even if it is the first day. Besides, he's doing it in a private space, not literally doing it in front of everybody, now that is creepy, pathetic, and desperate.

Also, how in the world is that enough to make an assumption that he is pathetic just from that and immature? You need to get your head checked, because you are so out of touch with everything happening in the world, goodness me.

"Which is probably he got hurt in someone," now? Remind me how much of a judgemental ass you are. No, you're not being harsh, you're just being idiotic in toxic levels that I just want to vomit on your face because of how repulsive your entire comment is. Get a grip and introspect yourself because you are totally the model citizen here.