All Comments on 'If It Fits Well...'

Good concept but you need to flesh out the action

I hope that this chapter was a foundational one that's going to support future chapters that have more sex in them. I was kind of disappointed there wasn't more sex in this chapter.

Definitely time and space for this saga to unfold at least several more chapters, and I think mom would be happiest to keep it in the family.

Good start to what can be a great multi part story. I hope you write in extended sections of the sexual interactions of the characters.

There should be plenty!

Maybe too many words devoted to women's clothes, not enough devoted to description of sex. This was a good start for a 6-page story, but not enough action for a 2-pager.

no body descriptions? what do the girls look like and daddy for that matter. i agreed with the fact to much clothing talk and Allie did not describe her sexual encounter with dad. after Mellie sucked his cock, there was little else about Daddy and Allie. there was no dirty talk about pussy, tits, cock, ass..... there was more dirty talk in chapter one than this part , even then no description of anyone.... as a reader, i want to know what the people look like... please remember that a picture is like a thousand words but description can be done in just a few lines

I received the following anonymous feedback in my email:

"This story is a continuation of that of Melanie, Allison, and their Father, begun in "If It Fits...".

Comments:

Putting that information IN the story, the lack of chapter number, earns ratings of 1 for both chapters."

I admit my story could use some better editing. I think that applies to most authors. I also appreciate the fact that ratings are subjective. We are truly at the mercy of those who read our stuff. Still, if you send barbs, might you not sharpen them a bit? If you wish to criticize, please have at it, but a more specific or detailed comment would be more helpful. Awarding the minimum score possible certainly should carry some specific comments alongside. Thanks for reading and I really do appreciate those who give me usable feedback. It should ultimately result in better stories.

I absolutely loved this chapter and the preceding one too. They are well written with enough eroticism to make things happen.