All Comments on 'If Life Was Easy'

There is always a first time and I'm looking forward to another chapter staring Clementine, Gavin and Lavender. This was an enjoyable read so no matter what anyone says pat yourself on your back. You took the leap to join the rest of the authors on this site of the talented. Welcome.

Can't wait to read more

It's a good first story, but please find someone to edit, I believe that you can find someone through Lit. There are so many commas and other punctuation missing and grammar, it will only make a good story better by getting someone to edit it. However I look forward to seeing more from you.

You're doing great just a few errors but nothing that can't be fixed. My only problem was that it wasn't long enough. As I was getting into it...it was over. I look forward to your next update, and hope that you make it longer, and sooner rather than later. Keep up the good work!!!

I think for your 1st story -- this was very good. The character development/background is essential and you've laid down the foundation. If you are in need of editing services, please feel free to email me: sugarysweetness904@yahoo.com

Really good start to the story i can not wait to read more. It was well written and flowed very well. it is a great first posting

Congrats on your first submission! Very good start and I look forward to the next chapter.

okay, interesting plot. However, your grammar nearly butchered this chapter! you need an editor.

That was a very solid start. While it does need an editors touch and maybe a bit more length it does have solid characters and a very interesting plotline. Don't keep us too long in suspense mami!

butchering this chapter?

your story had a nice plot and the flow is going well; however, since you asked for advise, I'll give you some...but always constructive, of course.

1. Your sentences are interesting, but at times too long and confusing because they are missing a comma. This allows the reader to take a quick pause in the reading to catch their breath.

2. Perhaps it's only me, but...there seemed to be a lot of repetition. Try to find words that possess the same meaning and use them. Rearrange your sentences if you have to and figure out what works best for you.

3. I feel as if this is the most important part of writing a story and I do it sometimes three or four times before I submit any of my work: reread what you have written. At times your computer won't catch all of the faults that your eyes will. For example what if you meant to use the word While (= whilst, whereas, though), but instead you accidentally typed Wile (= trick, con, scam)? The computer would accept it all the same even if it doesn't go along with the context of your sentence.

With that aside, keep up the good work and I'm looking forward to reading your next submission. If you ever have questions just ask and I'll try to be as helpful as possible.

I appreciate everyone that took the time to read my story. Everyone that gave advice I'm taking into consideration.The ones that offered their help thank you so much. I know I need help with some of my grammar and spell check mistakes. And everyone else that just liked my story thank you so much . Love you to pieces. : )

Before I forget one of my readers had a question about the dance studio and about preschooler that I didn't put in the story.

If a child is going to compete in dance competitions that child can be in the studio 5 to 7 days a week to 3 hours a day .

But if a child is just there for recreation fun and just a after school activity then that child can be there for an hour up to 2 hours. The days would depend on the parent.

what a wonderful start honey keep up the good work.

This story is really good. I can't wait to read more. You are very brave to put it out here. Congratulations!

The characters are interesting and so is the plot. Great beginning!!!

I am trying to visualize someone almost 200 lbs at 5'4" with 34 Ds dancing gracefully. Why is the guy fit, but the female not esp. with her line of work? I can understand being overweight, but to be realistic ain't nobody dancing gracefully carrying so much weight at 5'4". Good story line though--maybe there is a personal or medical reason that caused her to gain.

I like the story and i cant wait for the next chapter..keep up the good work..

Can't wait for more!

I like it and I know what its like when people are trying to give you a grammar lesson when your trying to just test the waters and write for fun, but I like it.

I think that it is awesome that you are writing; however, an editor would help with the myriad of grammatical errors found in your story.