All Comments on 'Imaginary Infidelity'

Well written fantasy

Very well done. Nearly flawless word crafting. Most notably, a virtually unique story line in that the woman is lusting over the sexual wanderings of her spouse. The reverse, with the man enjoying his wife's extra-marital activity, is common on here, as I know it is in real life.

But on the constructive critique side, this will be blasted as way too brief, without a chapter number in the title. I don't know if you plan a continuation, but will read if if I happen to run into it.

Please don't use second person. You don't know me, and I don't have a husband.

Well written but telling me what “I” will do is problematic. M

Tell me what “she” is doing.

Second person stories suck.

Interesting.

"You led awake in the dark." WTF is this? Try writing English.

1*

Great twist on a common theme.

You actually make Second Person perspective work.

Second person absolutely doesn’t work in this mess.

second person POV

NO SCORE

Don’t listen to the people complaining about second person POV. Some stories aren’t for everyone, and some people have a hard time understanding that.

This story was great. It was short and sweet and to the point. Also, seeing a twist on a common trope is refreshing.

Great story! 5/5

Great story. I like that she's enjoying her fantasy and in my mind her husband isn't cheating on her. Thank you for allowing us to draw our own conclusions.

"Led" at the beginning should be corrected, I think it would be "laid" or "lay"

Thanks again!