All Comments on 'Impersonating Brianne'

Alan has found a wife. She's not an escort, she's his wife...

One of the richest stories I have ever read. The author simply pulled me in and I was no longer reading, but experiencing strong emotions. Thank you HLD!

The Hoary Cleric

Wonderful story, 10 stars! I love your work!!

Unlike many of your other stories, this is the first time that I have read this one.

I normally refrain from commenting until after the final chapter, HOWEVER ..........

One thing that annoys me greatly is comments on story parts that readers generally have ZERO life experience with!!

My wife died over 30 years ago when we were both in our early 20`s, and it came straight out of the blue.

So the fact that the gent in the story was crying two years after her death, is not only a very real possibility, it is in fact very probable.

Even after all this time, and the fact that I have been with my current and loving partner for over 30 years, there are STILL times that I miss my wife.

The one difference is that our daughter was almost 3 when her Mum died, and to be 100% honest, it was caring for her that kept me going through the darkest times.

I know many men and countless women have been through a similar time in their lives, usually minus the money though, but the vast majority wold readily give up everything just to have that extra 5 or 10 minutes with the one they love.

You never "get over" losing a wife or husband or partner, you get THROUGH it, and sadly the "guilt" described in the story is all too real.

Sometimes I wish people would at least TRY to think about the real gamut of emotions before opening their mouths or their laptops!!

Directly to the author I would say congratulations on dealing with the death of a wife in your tales, and the thoughful way that you deal with it, although I DO get the impression that you write with personal experience of such a loss (havent read your "On Death" yet).

Another winner from you.

Reader illwind got chastised and personally attacked because of his critique. I though do agree with him. This is not SciFi with cteatures from outer space, its a romance between 'earthlings'. I'm willing to suspend my disbelieve regarding the plot, but the characters should be rooted in reality to a degree. So illwinds remarks are spot on, in my opinion.

Add to it that two years after his wifes died he is a cry-baby on one hand, but revels in making a payed whore beg for his cock, like in some sort of gettho porn or a derivative thereof, "because he likes to be in control". So romantic when a guy needs to have his ego stroked that way.

And she, a seasoned pro, is swayed because he fucks her so good? Puleeease! That IS definitely too far out.

Had he payed her to be his companion on the Vegas trip in a platonic way, and had they developed feelings for each other resulting in sex, this story could actually work without creating such extremely unbelievable characters.

Sweet, sweet Romance.

Over 16 years writing. Amazing.

Sometimes ready the comments is more tear jerking than the stories.

People: Suspend reality, get into a travel machine, and just enjoy what the author is offering.

very good, very interesting. makes my eyes wet with tears and sympathy, and hope for new love and a hope for a successful restaurant named "Brianie's"

So, Pretty Woman, basically.

World-Class Story! 5+++++/5!

This is fabulous. Simply wonderful. 5* more if it were possible.

So poignant. So good. I can’t wait to get into the next chapter. Thank you, HLD.

Five stars without a doubt.

Beautiful story about the developing relationship between two different but like people. The intimate sexual content is exciting and very descriptive, but the building of the relationship between Marissa and Alan really is the core of this romantic story. I read the original story in its entirety when it was first published, but now the last 2-3 pages are omitted. These last pages complete the story and explain the outcome. These pages are needed to fully explain how the relationship between Marissa and Alan finally reaches its full development. A beautiful love story which should please everyone who believes real, true love.

One of the best!

This has been one of the more compelling stories I've read in quite a while. Halfway through I realized I wanted to keep pounding through to the end, now because the sex was steamy (though it was), but because I wanted to enjoy the *story*.

Thank you,

been years but...

riveting, and so glad to have run across it again

going into 'Best" folder, and will be high in it too

glad there's 2 more chapters..have vague recollection of them...

impressed, and happy, you're still writing 14 yrs after this posted, and looking forward to what else you've written pity can only vote once....

the ill wind. Note the publication date of the story, pinhead! And do everyone else a favor; go suspend your disbelief in literature written for your comprehension level; try Dick, Jane, and Spot.

HLD is one of the best writers to ever grace this site.

"Almost none of her other clients had ever played with her breasts"

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Jesus Christ...I finally had to just stop at that line. I mean, seriously? It was hard enough to believe a modern day prostitute would be so unfamiliar with "the girlfriend experience"(certainly one who is charging $2500/day). Now I'm supposed to believe that Alan is the first guy to take an interest in her breasts? Yeah, you know us guys, we by and large have no interest in a nice pair of tits. Just not our thing, right? I mean, it's not like common knowledge that the vast majority of men are all but obsessed with them or anything. Oh wait, it is totally like that.

This honestly might be the most unrealistic portrayal of a call girl I've ever read.

And exceptional work by a truly talented writer. Done so well. Greatly anticipating continuing the story and getting more into these absorbing two characters.

I knew how it was going to go and how it would probably end, but you made the characters come to life.

5* plus just gets better each time I read it. In my favorites

Ron/ cowboyridecc@yahoo

I still give this a 5

They have fallen in love but they do not know it.

Ron

cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

Well written story

Most residents dislike the hassle of crossing "the Strip" to get to the other side of town. There is the part of the city in which people live and work, and the part where tourists come to party. They are not the same.

Thank you for this story got this cynical male weeping

does not usually work out well.

but the barriers are already down,

they should spend some time and get to know each other

A truly giving loving tender story. The more that I read it te more that I enjoy it. It is truly a love story. It is in my favorites and there are a few stories that I put in the same level. Colleen has to be tied with it as the number one love story and Some Things are ment to be and part 2 I Want to be in love and McKalyas Miracle run a close second.

Ron

Texas

cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

He paid a hooker over $20K plus airfare food and extras then was over the moon saving $10K on equipment. Odd part to the story.

Patch

This story was posted in 2006. It has continued to be frequently read and almost totally without exception justifiably praised to high heaven. There is only one other story on Literoica that I like as well as this one and that is Colleen by Texas Refugee. I think the two stories are equals.

REALLY A GOOD STORY. MARISSA IS FALLING IN LOVE.

RON TEXAS cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

This may be the best I have encountered here. Thank you for sharing your storytelling with us mere mortals.

This is a must read. I love the story, it's not just a make me hard and want to have sex story. It is a real love story and very well written. I will have to read everything else HLD has written now. Hope there is a lot and that they are all as well done. Much thanks to the author. Well done!

NOT MY FIRST TIME TO READ THIS STORY AND NOT THE LAST. SO WARM SO HEART FELT. SHE IS FALLING FOR HIM HARD AND THAT IS GOOD. 5 STARS PLUS

RON TEXAS

The best story I have read in here!!!

This is the second time I have read the chapters of this series, and the story is as enjoyable as the first time I read it.

George in Omaha

I read a lot of stories on here, but you made me love these characters so much. Deep feelings, loss, love, lust, it's a roller coaster and I loved it !!! Marissa surprised me and Alan touched me. Thank you for sharing your story. xo

I thought it was well written and evocative. Great read.

in love with hooker CAT.

to bad it ended

hookers tales are making a comeback. whatta shame the only subject some can author

the movie would be a complete waste of my time. I'd rather READ this story & I'm both glad & proud to admit it. I knew that when I was on page 2; I haven't even read pt# 2 & 3, I don't have to.

Sincerely;

DKP

being re-erected

A good story, loved it. Thanks

This is Not a sex story but a Love story that has sex in it. I rate it a 6

I don't think Richard Gere and Julia Roberts could have done this any better, and it was so much more than that movie ever aspired to be. I really liked the window created in her inner monologue, and I cheered her surrendering her heart to him. So well written: an obvious "5" !!!

I can stop imagining alan from two and a half men..shit!

I feel so cheated. It seemed to stop so abruptly. This had to hurt to write in some way, but I don't understand why there isn't more. This hit hard on so many levels. Thank you.

For some reason this had me tearing up, so emotional..this is the mark of a good writer, five stars

Should be a film script. Seriously.

Aw, this story is so sweet. I felt so bad for him that both his wife and baby died during birth :*(

beautiful story and also sizzling hot! keep writing!

You are an extremely gifted writer. This story is absolutely amazing. It has everything- the love growing between Marissa and Alan, the sadness Alan feels when he remembers his wife, the heat and the passion of the sex. It's so- honest. Even the grammar and spelling are correct (one of my pet peeves [= ). You should seriously consider becoming a - legitimate? (you know what I mean) author. You'd make more money than Marissa ;)

Reminded me a lot of Pretty Woman haha

but this story had its own flavor

it was also pretty hot. Mmmm :) haha

I really loved the first part of this story but waited to read the whole series before commenting ! I love to read many different categories. I can't think of a story in this category that I have enjoyed as much. Wonderful and sweet and sexy!

Reading this brought tears to my eyes more than once. You truly have a gift for writing. Please don't ever forget that!

damnit, why does the story have to be so eloquent? i read this for the second time...tonight!

This is by far the best romantic story I've ever read. I can't way to read the rest.

My dear friend, you write with such an awesome intensity that my heart quench.

Thanks for such a wonderful literature.

All the Best.

- JoKeR_JcK

This was an excellent piece of literature; it was one the best pieces of literature i've read

among the best ones, go ahead

As I state above, I have never made a comment about any of the stories on this site; I now find myself compelled to do so. There are no suprises here; however, it is one of the best written and most compelling stories I have ever read on the site.

I greatly look forward to its future chapters.

I hope you continue to write and provide such excellent reading.

My only issue is that I cannot rate it with six or seven stars.

this wonderous trilogy of yours several times. I can't get enough of this beautiful story. A true romance. As a male, in his mid 50's; this story to me is magnificent. I gravitate to the "loving wives" genre and prefer those endings with both spouses staying true, after he finds out his wife was a porn star, mens magazine model, crack whore, or hooker before they met, where they save each other. You accomplished all that and so much more with this glorius story. Your story makes "Pretty Woman" an also ran. Thank you for you.

This story was so romantic and sweet, which is understandable, seeing as this was put in the "Romance" category. With only 4 grammar/usage/spelling errors I had found, this was written really well. Your characters were well developed, and I really felt as if I understood the situation they are in. I truly enjoyed the love shared between the two protagonists. And Marissa's headstrong and intelligent(/multitalented) personality cracks me up. GREAT character. Alan's brokenness with his dead love was heartwarmingly sweet. You matched your characters well. Also, your story line was very distinctive; very realistic in the Literotica.com sense. In addition, your sex scenes were really good. You had a variety of different types of sex: rough sex, spontaneous sex, quickie, products of making love, sex with and without orgasm(s). However, I suggest adding more details. I don't really know how anybody looks, other than Marissa and her glory as a sexy call girl. I know Alan is good looking, but does he have abs? Does Marissa have brown hair? Etc. And your description of the surroundings could have been a bit more developed. What does the conference dining room look like? What you have written is amazing, but I feel as if a bit more details won't hurt. Also, I believe some oral sex would be exciting.

In conclusion, you did an amazing job.

17 :D's / 23 :D's

keep up the good work!

<3 LaLaLadidahGirl

Story isnt over yet anon. Good work dropping spoilers. Even if they were predictable.

i'm sorry,but i tought a longer version of this very same story. it ended with both of them get married, open the restaurant, and having baby noelle... am i just imagining things or was it a different story?

You made these characters so real and I cried for them, broken-hearted and lonely. Love is so precious -- life is so fragile -- and this story is a truly moving reminder of that. You are gifted, and I am grateful to have read your work.

This is the third or fourth time I've read this story in its entirety. It is, in my opinion, the single best story of all those I've read on this site or any other. It is incredibly intelligently written and edited. While there are a few grammatical and/or spelling errors, they are very few and don't take the reader away from the story. The romance that grows between Alan and Marissa is woven through the story expertly. The erotic scenes are among the best ever written. I could go on, but I think I've made my point. Bravo to HLD!

This story has all the hallmarks of a master story teller. The plot is directed by the characters, characters who are well rounded and deep.

The setting is only sketched but included enough detail to make Las Vegas real. Marissa's internal dialogue appears honest and reminded me of the movie "Pretty Woman."

The sex scenes are realistic and erotic rather than ponographic. Thus, I felt an unexpected emotional impact, much like Marissa, and an understanding of the love growing between this unlikely pair.

The writing style is excellect and the voice of the author is strong and clear. The plot twist in Chapter Four adds depth to Marissa's character and moved the story to Alan and the decisions he will have to make in the future. Other readers as well as me would like to see the rest of the story (i.e., cliche from Paul Harvey).

Thank you for a beatiful story with a character driven plot.

this is definitely one of the best stories i have ever read on literotica (and that's saying something). i know you get a lot of people praising your work and countless people saying what i'm about to say but, thank you for writing and posting this. it really is amazing.

HLD,keep it up its a great story

This is an endearing, emotional, sensual tale. It really tapped into my emotional side in the best way. Congratulations on a very well written story. Excellent story line so far. Can't wait to read the next chapters! Thank you for sharing!

... and I mean StoryTelling, not fuck-tales.

The erotic aspects are wonderful - Because they fit the story, the characters.

Thanks for sharing your talent!

M

Absolutely brilliant! Beautiful, tender and makes one wonder if it is fiction.

Thank you.

someone should make a movie out of this story ...

This story was very well thought out, well crafted, and very evocative. Your words painted vivid pictures in my mind, and elicited emotions from me that most stories cannot do.

The sudden ending left me hanging a little, however I know that there are further chapters. I look forward to reading more from you. Well done !

Well thought out. Very close to my own relationship with exwife friend after close of relationship. Would be look forward to follow-up story as to what happens next. Seems incomplete, but great story and writing so far.

I give it fifty percent because it was ok. I understood at the end what the "Brianne look alike" meant, but at the same time I thought it was something that was a little bit rhetorical, you know, of course he couldn't marry her, but I also thought she was sort of audacious for saying that she wouldn't marry him because it wasn't like she asked him to. In a way, it was like he wanted closure of his past life with Brianne. That's the way I understood it. The whole reason was probably meant to relive his wife time with him, which mean that he wasn't ready to let go, but by the end, he ended up getting closure from the past. It was an alright entry.

...but then the pace picked up. Now I'm hooked. I want to learn what happens next. Will their relationship continue? A partnership in a restaurant? Just a sexual relationship? -- maybe romance only? Marriage? I can't wait to find out. Thanks for a well-written story.

In the good sense! Interestingly we and Alan know practically nothing about Marianna, but truly we know all that she knows.

I read this before I started commenting. Thank you very much HLD

I loved this story and i have read it many times. I would however love to read the story from Alan's perspective. I'd love to read about the emotions he has to be going through. keep up the great job! your a very talented writer

I read this series a long time ago and somehow stumbled back to it. Wow. Reads even better the second time around. One of the most romantic stories I've ever read.

by the story and the raw feelings that go between the characters. I've read all the series in this one and i enjoy your works and you write beautifully.

I love it, I don't know what is ahead but I have a feeling this is going to be my all time favorite.

Happy to read your story. Because this is a real story, with just the right amount of thoughts empathy and love... Cheers Yoron.

Excellent is what fits.

Sally

This is a fabulous story and I enjoyed every sentence - except for a few and an example follows. The only heartburn I have about it has to do with whether Alan will feel badly about all the other men she fucked. This is a generational thing, I think, since I'm an old man, but it also has to do with my own experiences.

The thing I didn't like is shown in the following example:

"Alan, I like you, too. You're unlike any man I've known for a long, long time."

I just don't believe you should EVER have lovers or anyone who is close compare people to make a point that is intended to infer something superlative in a relationship. She should have said:

"Alan, I like you, too. You're unlike anyone I've ever known."

it seems like you took my worst nightmare and turned it into a dream come tru. there are times i avoid relationships caus i feel like Alan. i am happy that some one writes about tru lov and not lust.

What a great though sad story. He will never forget his wife and child but he will make it through with Marissa's help. Hopefully we can get a update.

What a great story -- i felt l;ike i was there, in the emotions. And the sex was hot too! :)

Seriouslyt I really like the characters and they seem like real people to me. I am looking forward to reading the rest of the story.

An enchanting tale that warms the heart even if it's a retelling of the "hooker with a heart of gold". The characters come to life and the author graciously shows us their strengths, their weaknesses, their highs and their lows in a pleasant flow of superbly written prose.

The scenes flow together seamlessly and it is a credit to the author's talent. Not many can do so well. The plot, though somewhat predictable, is lovingly handled and the central conflict is internal to the two protagonists. Its resolution is smooth and unforced with each character growing towards their new life together in a way that feels natural.

Kudos also for your descriptive abilities of the luxury hotel in Vegas. Having stayed there myself, it was quite pleasant to relive some good memories that your writing brought back.

An excellent effort, HLD, and worthy of praise. This 100's for you, for a story well-written and well done. Excellent fiction this is.

Your writing is incredible. The sex is part of the story, rather than the focus of it. And that's a good thing. I'm going to look for your other work, and I would encourage you to consider writing professionally, if you're not doing so already. The resemblance to 'Pretty Woman' is only superficial. There's a pathos in your presentation that is stronger than anything Hollywood can produce.

I couln't wait to read the next page. Like Pretty Woman only better! It flowed so easily, captivating yet supremely sensuous. I enjoyed it immensely and look forward to the sequel??? and anything else submitted by HLD.

This story has such feeling to it. I love it.

Ditto re: others comments. However, I need to praise your writing. Slick, cool and well done. Your took care to say it right. Thank you. Keep up the good work and your standards.

The sex I can take. The passion and lust I expect. It was all a huge turn on...Then you had to go and make me like them. Hell I even sympathize with Marrisa, whore that she is (was?). But pathos?? On a porn site? Grief, bitterness, sadness, and gut renching loneliness? As Sinefled used to say..."What's with thaaaat...?" What indeed...It's nice to be reminded about what being a human being really is all about...Nice...

This was a story that you couldn't quit reading. It has sex and but more important it has love that will attract both men and women. Thank you

Seriously, it was such a beautiful story. Kind of a cliffhanger at the end there, but I'm sure everything worked out ok...right?

This story was so beautiful. A call girl made a man happy because she portrayed his wife, if only in physical features. However, hey built something between them. I loved the honesty between them, throughout the entire story! Perfect ending!!

Great story, but other than the twist of Marissa being a copy of the dude's wife, it reminds me an awful lot of "Pretty Woman".

The opening is a little bit plain. But the story evolved to be amazing as it went. Not much background on the Marissa character, but that's ok. Thanks for writing such a sweet story and sharing it.