All Comments on 'In The Park, In The Dark'

... I think you need to avoid using the same adjectives repeatedly. The urgency and pace was exciting but perhaps try to be a little more coy with the description to help create the build up. It started at 100 mph and stayed at the same speed. You need to describe the various changes of gear to build the pace.

Used to do the same thing a few years back in South East London, fucking loved it, thanks for the story, it brings back happy memories

Same story, same title, posted 2007. You stealing others' work?

I wrote this story several years ago under an different user name, but the email address associated with it expired. Everything i post is by me and original, and mostly based on true events. This story is mine, and I claim copy-write to it

Loved it