All Comments on 'Indenture: Termination of Service'

Exit Time Suitcase

The term is up; the time has been served. Is the obligee in this dystopia where people pledge years of their lives an bind themselves to service ready to go? What will be her future relationship with people she leaves behind?

love the story and how one such dystopia future could happen. I will wait for the next chapter of this story if there is one.

was this a sequel

Thank you Dr Davis, Dragon and Gambling

While this is a self - standing story, with its own beginning middle and end, it is also part of the world of a dystopia described in the INSTITUTE series. The assumption is that if present trends continue, the bounce back, from liberal credit and easy - going bankruptcy will be a return to a rigid, authoritarian 19th century system. Dragon, I have been thinking of a sequel.

Dear Gamblin' and Dragon:

I am thinking of a sequel, but ideas are still percolating. Ellen is a voluntary indenturee. She gave up her freedom for money. A wage slave. In The Institute: Private Sale of an Indenturee, I present another aspect of this dystopia: the story of an indenturee who pledged her body as collateral for a debt.

The premise is that if in 2012 a declining 48% of the population was supporting a burgeoning 52%, eventually no one would go to work and the system would collapse. In the bounce back, we'd find a return to a simpler time of the manor. Interestingly 19th century Marxists looked on the Manor as a model for their heaven on earth.

Freedom is lost bit by bit. The mouse learns too late why the cheese is free.

MMH. Very nicely written, captures interactions, moods and conflicts very well. But where does the plot lead? Not really conclusive ending, more like an intermediate slowdown, before another chapter picks up, possibly from another angle, and offers a convincing plot closure.

Dear Anon

Thank you for your comment. Students graduate, prisoners are paroled, soldiers are discharged. What happens to friends left behind? Where does the newly freed person take freedom from a confinement of different types to the unbounded possibilities of personal autonomy? I think that's the state the newly freed indenturee finds herself in.

My view on a short short story is that it affords only one perspective character. Others may disagree.

Good story. It needs a part two to determine what she does and if she is reunited with her husband.

Dear Anon:

Thank you Anon for your comment.

The plus of many of the Literotica writers who speculate how easy credit and liberal bankruptcy will lead to a form of indentured servitude,public auctions and subjugation have written in chapters. The story line and the characters may get muddled after so many chapters.

I started the Institute as such a series, but decided to tell it as self - standing vignettes, short stories which are independent of each other but linked by common themes.

The story of Ellen continues in INDENTURE RECYCLED PROPERTY. ( https://literotica.com/s/indenture-recycled-property ).

Thank you for your comments.