All Comments on 'Indian Housewife Misadventures Ch. 04'

This writing simultaneously in two languages is shitty. Then you seem to transliterating many of your sentences from Hindi instead of writing natively in English.

While I appreciate your enthusiasm, you need to take a course in creative writing and also get yourself an editor. Otherwise you are just one more of the lots of riffraff writers floating around here.

3 stars for your last 2 stories....firstly although the protagonist are the same, the stories are completely unrelated and not having any logical end, secondly it seems a very very unsatisfied housewife whose boobs are smaller than her waist 3DD Vs 36, and on top of that all those acting and talking slutty being the mother of a 19 yr old college going son is a bit unheard off. kudos to you for wearing that saree real low and skimpy blouse , but make your story trustworthy....read stories of aurelius, mnhb, shiprat, solewinner, kanyakumari007, sonali jain, rupanita, rubysen, etc.....they were the masters of classic Indian erotica.....I am not saying you are writing bad, I gave 5 stars for your first two stories, but 3 stars each for your last 2 ! you have an unique ability to write excellent wrotics, just needs more polish and direction...my 2 cents