All Comments on 'Into the Fire Ch. 02'

that dildo scene took my breath away. What a sexy story. I am really enjoying the characters, and wondering how they are going to handle the conflict that you have set up. As always your stories are well written, and entertaining. Im looking forward to ch. 3

This is the first of your stories I have read MayhemLass, but it certainly won't be the last! The emotional tensions you have set up seem very believable and I could almost feel Stephs torn up emotions in the triangle. Great writing.

Another potentially beautiful story ruined by a fucking strap-on!

Fabulous. I just wish it were longer/ had additional chapters.

i would love to have you continue with this story.you are one of the better writers on this site.

A gorgeous story - so vivid, and the lust between the two women seems so tangible. I could smell the sex. Steph's orgasms are beautifully described - the image of her ejaculating uncontrollably over Gaby's body is a very powerful one indeed. Please write a third part - I want these two to make love again!

great story line, i think you should keep it going.

Seeing you've recently updated your profile, maybe there's hope after all that you will continue this wonderful story after four years. It was interesting reading both parts back-to-back as it appeared that your style became more fluid as you went on. The second part was tremendous, with a real cliffhanger of an ending.

I also felt that the use of the dildo, which I sometmes think is there to pander to men's tastes, was reallly justified in this story as a first indicator of Gaby's jealousy (clever trick!).

Keep on writing, where-ever you're publishing.

R.

I just read this chapter and I can't believe you hadn't wrote another one. Could you please take a little time to write another one.

gosh i first thought there was no 2nd chapter than i realized there was and started to read ... and oh god ... it's so good, but at the moment i am sitting here thinking... please, please continue the story.

I could stop after the first chapter but now ... i am absolutely looking forward to reading another installment.

keep up the good work! <3

What the hell happened here. Chapter 1 was very much an awakening and erotic story. Now I am almost repulsed by Chapter 2. It's over wrought with flamboyant adjectives and repetitive decriptions of the women's body. However, what incensed me most was the use of "rape" to describe the use of a dildo in a loving consensual sex act between two women. How dare that word be used in this instance, when in comparison, Steph's husband constantly brutalizes her vagina and denies her orgasms to prevent her from squirting, which he finds disgusting. I won't further berate their situation with his lack of cunnilingus. Secondly, how dare Steph tongues her female lover with the after taste of her husband's cum in her mouth. Like WTF, have the decency to rinse with water, mouthwash, or some kind of beverage and then pop a mint. If this was a paperback, Into the Fire it would go. Mayhem, if you plan to continue the series, I hope you are sensitive to the fact, this is the Lesbian Sex category. I'm no prude but the double standards and redundancies detracts from your work (in My opinion). This is an interesting story and I look forward to reading what you do next

I'm with germanchocolate4u. The tone changed markedly, too rapidly and I'd recommend a re-edit taking out that rape reference. It jarred. The strap on sex was urgent and almost angry. I struggle too with stories in the lesbian section that include graphic descriptions of hetero sex, esp describing cocks!