All Comments on 'Into the Tribe Ch. 01'

This first chapter is all "set up" and background for and to the characters, but it certainly looks like it could go in interesting directions. A little more care in editing/proof-reading would be good as it is a jarring to see, for example, a plural when a possessive is meant.

I look forward to reading more.

will there be more?

EThis is outstanding writing with a ring of truth to it. Perhaps the author is a part-time anthropologist. The writing is in the same vein as Michael and Katerine Geer's tales.

But, how the hell could a caring author leave the story just hanging like this?

This story would be dynamite, were it taken to a conclusion instead of something akin to coitus interuptus.