All Comments on 'Isabel, The Beauty Next Door Pt. 02'

I like it, keep going!

Looking forward to the next chapter, hopefully soon.

Still enjoying the story and really happy you found someone to edit. My grandparents were from Surrey and they didn't share some of your local ways of saying things but your writing reminds me of them. I hope you are enjoying what you are creating.

Loved the 2chapters written so far hope there will be more

Hi, thanks for your comments. It's always good to get feedback. I'm in the process of writing 3 now, so please be patient and keep an eye out.

Cheers

Lots of interesting plot elements in play. Looking forwward to the next installment.

UR a talent and love your story so far. Hope to see more as U get a chance.

Gave you another 5. Thanks for listening and fixing the spelling. You are doing a great job!

Loving the story.

Well done, a true love story.

Fun story. Intriguing and nicely developing. Yes, better with the spelling. You probably have, if not I say engage a proofreader. It’s very difficult to effectively proofread your own work. Still, very well written so far. Thanks for your story.

This one was so much smoother and the editing improved the flow greatly. Thanks for implementing reader input!

Unfortunately, like there were huge positives like James lambasting Bradly and James' mom finally standing up for him, the oddest thing happened...the story hit me as far too "agreeable" or in other words, too convenient. Here's why: regardless of how "lesbian" Isabel's parents might have thought she was, they wouldn't have ever just let her start going over to James' house and up to his room like "ok, wow...let her explore her sexuality with him." Never happen anywhere, as dads always treat their girls like "little girls" when a guy is involved with "exploring" their little girl. While there was some leftover trauma from a previous guy she told James about, all this is just too convenient and as the story posits, "too fast." To seem real, these kind of developments might have happened around pt 5, not pt 2. Cannot continue reading. 1

Ehh James is really unlikeable. 18 y/o has never heard of a hymen? I thought this was in 1950's where they've never had sex-ed but they mention wifi so....