All Comments on 'Island Massage'

Writing a story in the second person never works. You immediately alienate half your potential readership. You keep say 'you' this and 'you' that and I think well, who is he speaking to? Not me!

You also need to correct all the many grammar and spelling errors.

Besides correcting the obvious grammar mistakes, you’ve written a fantasy common to many!! Next time, try sticking with 3rd person only.

Very erotic. Works for me.