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DAMN, I HAVE TAKEN 9 INCHES OF BBC DON MY THROAT. AND I WOULD GO FOR TRYING THE TEN OR FOURTEEN INCH MEAT

With a typo in the title and another in the first line, this did not start out well. The idea could have been a good one, but with poor grammar and confusing depiction, the story becomes unreadable, The author may have gotten a little hot-and-bothered while writing this and posted straight after. Always a good idea to let yourself calm down first so you can concentrate on the mistakes first, happens to me too, it's easily done. Otherwise, a nice start, but needs work.